| Title: Chapter 08
| 22 Feb 2009 2:33 am
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| Reviewer: ObsessiveaboutSnape (Anonymous)
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HELLO!!!!!!!!!!! I really really like this. ou shold update!! Or are you not writing this anymore. Its a smae if you're not, this is really a good read.
| Title: Chapter 08
| 06 Jan 2009 9:02 am
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| Reviewer: rampaging bookcase (Anonymous)
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....wow......just one question......why haven't you updated it? *sniff* WHY?!??!?!?!?!?!?!?!!!!!!........ahem....
WOW!
I love the interaction!
| Title: Chapter 08
| 01 Jul 2008 12:10 am
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| Reviewer: onaleia (Anonymous)
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7 out of 10: unfinished, unbetaed, a bit wordy, excellent premise and story line, very good characterization. I did not feel Professor Snape was out of character given the parameters you are working within.
I enjoyed this. I'd love to see more, though I expect you've probably abandoned it at this point.
If you do decide to pick this back up I would be willing to beta for you. I'll drop you a line at your e-mail address.
this story is great, glad harry is safe now that he's away from the dursleys, hope they get what they deserve a stint in azkaban would be good or just send mouldywarts round to torture them, severus and his nan will be great for harry as he needs love and affection and nan will be there to do that. will we find out how snapes wife and daughter died, keep writing
| Title: Chapter 08
| 11 Apr 2008 4:43 am
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| Reviewer: Becky (Anonymous)
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I am loving this story and cannot wait for yout to write some more
It's interesting. Not amazingly so, but...pretty good if English isn't your first language.
If I may suggest, try making the dialogue relax a bit more. You seem to forget that Harry is fifteen, and trust me, at fifteen, no one talks, or THINKS like that. Snape's thoughts are okay-ish at best, but what he says is perfect. Completely in character.
Which brings me to another point. I know you said that this was an AU and that the characters would be slightly OOC, but Harry is WAY too much.
I understand what you're trying to do-make him appear abused and hurt, and whatever, but REALLY, Harry can't just roll over and suddenly like Snape.
He can in the end, you can't just STOP hating someone for four years and then suddenly like him.
So, SNAPE, he's fine. HARRY isn't.
All in all, though, the story is very interesting, and I can't wait to see what you plan to do with it! Keep up the good work!
| Title: Chapter 08
| 12 Feb 2008 3:50 am
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| Reviewer: Princess Arica of Rivendell (Anonymous)
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| Title: Chapter 08
| 10 Jul 2007 3:57 pm
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| Reviewer: kittycatgirl85 (Anonymous)
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I really like Apprentice. There is angst without going overboard and everyone drowning in the angsting. Also it is lovely that Harry can actually reason that Snape is not evil. I can't wait for the next update.
| Title: Chapter 08
| 12 May 2007 3:54 pm
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| Reviewer: Laira (Anonymous)
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Nice. I tried to review before bu that stupid security code is so small. ANYway, it's a lovely read and I'm enjoying it a lot. The reasons for the apprenticeship were well thought out and I'm looking forward to see what happens next.
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