Potions and Snitches
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Reviews For Temporal Guardian
Title: Chapter 2 03 Apr 2010 6:21 pm
Reviewer: Inu Chan (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Interesting story and premise. I often wondered how Hogwarts officials, who had to have seen neglected children, and especially after the "bars on the windows" incident, could have not known that something was wrong. You would have thought that they would have been monitoring such an important person much more closely. And for Dumbledore to blithely ignore someone like McGonagall deriding a family as "the worst kind of Muggles"...very out of character for her. So, long story short, good story and I want to find out what happens next, but some of the grammar and spelling problems are distracting to me. I think you would benefit by a very picky proofreader.

    Author's Response:

    You are right. It bothered me that the adults in the story are not aware of what happens around them. Thanks a lot for reviewing. Please if you point the grammar and spelling problems I will gladly correct them. 

     

    LL 

Title: Chapter 2 03 Apr 2010 5:07 pm
Reviewer: Valin (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Good story but a mean mean cliffie!!! Do update quickly! plz!! ; )

    Author's Response: I hope you like the next chapter. Thanks a lot for your review. LL
Title: Chapter 2 03 Apr 2010 10:40 am
Reviewer: heartstar (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Very nice imagery

    Author's Response: Thank you for reading my story and reviewing. LL
Title: Chapter 1 03 Apr 2010 6:45 am
Reviewer: darkorangecat (Signed) [Report This]
    I like that Molly was the one to bring up the idea that Harry might not be treated properly at home and that Madame Pomphrey investigates immediately. Harry's angry reaction is very believable as it would be difficult to understand how they could not have known and how, now that he knows they know, that nothing seems to be changing. Great start.

    Author's Response:

    Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing. I though that Molly should know something and as she states that Harry is almost a part of her family she should try to help him. I hope you like the next chapter. : ) 


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