this is very interesting. i can't wait to read more!
Lockhart is absolutely CHILLING!
I am dying to read the next chapter! I like your writing style and Snape acts - even for all his concern - rather in character. Harry crying does seem a little... odd though. But, it works.
My favorite scene though, right now, is Harry's reaction to Lockhart touching his face. Going to the bathroom, scrubbing himself, and retching... It just makes it that much worse, I guess.
Can't wait for the next one!
| Title: Chapter 3
| 18 Feb 2011 2:32 am
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| Reviewer: Kristi (Anonymous)
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Don't just stop there! Also, you need to look out for spelling errors. For example, "whine" instead of "wine" and you kept misspelling Lockheart in a previous chapter.
i so hope to see more of this story soon
What- THAT'S ALL YOU HAVE UP!?!?! -whines-
| Title: Chapter 3
| 09 Dec 2010 1:53 am
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| Reviewer: meg (Anonymous)
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i absolutly love your story! and i can't wait to see where you take it.
Hi. I just wanted to tell you I like the story and to also offer up my services of beta. If you feel like continuing and feel like having someone beta it for you, please consider me.
Great story!! Please update soon!
Good start. I do hope you plan on continuing this. I've seen too many stories abandoned for my tastes. Please don't become one of them.
Thank you! I am enjoying your story very much. So many misunderstandings between Snape and Potter. I'm looking forward to the resolution. :)
Update soon, please.
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