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Title: Chapter 9. Discoveries 26 Jun 2010 2:35 am
Reviewer: Kristeh (Signed) [Report This]
    Great chapter, SHaria! I enjoyed all of it, Harry's learning to draw on the natural energy around him (It sounds like Harry is really learning some new techniques that can be very helpful in developing his power), his talk with Severus and Severus confiding that he has experienced abuse as well, and Harry's awakening feelings towards Anthony.

    Looking forward to more!

    Author's Response: Thank you so much Kristeh. I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter. I wasn't certain how this chapter would be received, but the response has been favorable thus far. Thank you for sharing your thoughts, SHaria
Title: Chapter 9. Discoveries 23 Jun 2010 2:48 am
Reviewer: silverstargirl (Signed) [Report This]
    I wonder why they didn't just go into the Great Hall together? I hope that their studying 'date' will go well. I wonder how long it will take for Harry to figure out that what he is feeling toward Anthony is what is generally referred to as attraction? :D

    Author's Response:

    I'm no authority on the subject of young men deciding their preference, but I do know that Harry was raised in a household that frowned upon homosexuality (I believe Vernon used the British slang: Nancy Boy, so I wouldn't be all that surprised if Harry might feel a tad self conscious. I'm not certain if I left in the sentence about Anthony being sensitive to Harry's preoccupation as they walked up to the castle (I had to do some editing to make this into a Sevitus chapter and not a Snarry chapter), but there used to be a sentence alluding to that fact. So, we'll just leave it there. Gotta go. Thanks for the review. Hugs, SHaria

     

     

Title: Chapter 9. Discoveries 22 Jun 2010 8:35 pm
Reviewer: KimSpiritTalks (Signed) [Report This]
    Another wonderful chapter. I loved the occlumency progress!

    Author's Response:

    I'm glad you liked Harry's adaptation of Occlumency. Thanks for reviewing. Hugs, SHaria

Title: Chapter 8: Beginnings 22 Jun 2010 1:35 am
Reviewer: Kristeh (Signed) [Report This]
    Great chapter again, SHaria! I really enjoyed it. Of course those surges of magic would be worrisome for Harry if he didn't know the cause or how to deal with it. I'm glad that Dumbledore arranged for Channon to come and explain and work with Harry. I wonder why Dumbledore hasn't taken on that responsibility himself...but I suppose he does already have a lot of responsibilities, lol.

    I especially loved the last scene with Severus and Harry. I had to grin at Severus' apology...no simple "I'm sorry" for him! But he did manage to say it aloud, and Harry accepted and apologized for his own mistakes too. And Severus showed insight and compassion in taking Harry away from his office and to a neutral relaxed setting, with no bad memories. I think it was a small sign, but an important one, of his sincere desire to begin anew with Harry and to help him succeed.

    And Harry is still just a typical kid, playing with his vegetables, lol.

    I love all the detail and thought you put into your story and I'm excited for the next chapter!

    Author's Response: Thanks Kristeh for your kind words and insightful review. I wrote this chapter nearly a year ago (for the Snarry version) and I remember that it took forever to write (over 2 months). So much to think through and lots of subtleties to work in. I'm so glad you appreciated it and thank you for letting me know. Hugs, SHaria
Title: Chapter 8: Beginnings 17 Jun 2010 8:50 pm
Reviewer: marcy1219 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Definition of a Mary Sue:

    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mary_Sue

    Author's Response:

    Thank you.

Title: Chapter 8: Beginnings 17 Jun 2010 3:26 am
Reviewer: marcy1219 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I was also enjoying the evolving Snape/Harry relationship, but I'm violently allergic to Mary Sue/Gary Stu characters, and the new DADA professor is such a great big ol' honkin' one that I doubt I'll continue reading this fic.

    Author's Response: I have no idea what Mary Sue/Gary Stu characters are. The character of Channon came from me. He isn'at based on anyone, but his name is a play on someone from the realm of energy/magic/qi. Can you figure it out????  (I haven't even gotten to what it is he does). None the less, good luck in your reading endeavors. Cheers, SHaria
Title: Chapter 8: Beginnings 16 Jun 2010 8:02 am
Reviewer: silverstargirl (Signed) [Report This]
    It's going to be difficult at first, but if they do manage to start anew it will help them to begin to really get to know one another. Hopefully, this time around they will avoid the problems they had in the beginning, namely Severus' deplorable treatment of Harry. It's really too bad that it took seeing the kind of childhood that Harry had for Severus to finally see him as Harry and not simply as the son of James.

    I really hope that Harry will be able to regain control of his magic. Until he does, there are sure to be some interesting happenings.

    Author's Response: Thanks for your nice long review silverstargirl. As I've mentioned in other responses: I always felt bad that Severus didn't rise to his potential in canon. He is smart, sensitive, clever ... I could go on-    So now he has apologized to Harry, face to face, and Harry has accepted his apology. Their work together will inspire them to deal with some personal issues: trust (for Harry) and facing one's own frailities (for Severus). As for the power surges, just wait. Cheers, SHaria
Title: Chapter 8: Beginnings 16 Jun 2010 4:47 am
Reviewer: min (Anonymous) [Report This]
    great scene with Snape.

    Author's Response: Thanks min. That whole bit with Snape took a long time to write; there was a lot that needed to be said. I'm glad you liked it. SHaria
Title: Chapter 3. Retrospect 16 Jun 2010 4:22 am
Reviewer: Anon #37 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Quite good.

    Author's Response: Thank you!
Title: Chapter 2. Waning 16 Jun 2010 4:16 am
Reviewer: Anon #37 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    "specious" - I don't think this word means what you think it means. I can't figure out what word you meant to use instead, but "specious" is an adjective usually used to describe something that sounds right on the surface but is actually wrong. Or, more generally, something which misleadingly looks good but which is actually bad.

    So, it doesn't really work in "The descent into the miasma of his depression was slow and specious. " Try instead - "His descent into depression was subtle and prolonged."

    Author's Response: Thanks for your input Anon #37, but actually- specious is exactly the word I wanted to use. You see, I also traveled down that slow and specious path a long time ago. One can't possibly realize the deceptive and gradual attributes of depression (and the journey getting there) unless you've experienced it.  All the unhealthy ways one starts to think seems plausible and even justified, but in truth it's like sinking into a pit of camouflaged quicksand. So yes, I believe specious sums up the journey and the character of the beast quite nicely. But again, I do appreciate you sharing your opinion. SHaria

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