Poor Harry and Hermione, you portray grief really well. I wonder if Severus is going to press Harry into becoming his assistant so he can encourage Harry to fight for a cure.
Very emotional chapter. I like the way in which you are subtly developing the characters, makeing Severus and Harry more open to the idea of friendship
Interesting premise to get Harry out of the tournament (which, I guess, was, itself, a device to ush Ron into an arguement with Harry and, thus, reveal part of the truth to Harry's friends- very subtly done. A good chapter.
Good portrayal of the character's reactions to Harry's poisoning; Harry's stubborn denial, Severus' determination to fix things and Dumbledore and Pomfrey's deep, yet restrained sadness all feel very in character. It's an interesting twist that you've set this before the Triwizard tournament and looks to be a useful plot device.
Wow, what a cliffhanger! I like what you've done with the plot for this chapter; Harry's motivation is believable, tragic and endearing, the accident realistic and the character interactions feel very natural and true to their canon personalities
Just wanted to say I really enjoyed your story. You really kept the characters believable without going over the top. I'd love to see more stories like this....I hope you decide to write others. Thanks for a terrific reading experience!!!
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