I think that Snape is finally beginning to see who Harry really is. My goodness! Harry is becoming like Hermione, with all the studying.
Great chapter as usual!
| Title: Chapter 3
| 26 Jul 2010 10:33 pm
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| Reviewer: Tutti Frutti (Anonymous)
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Awesomeness once again. I look forward to your next chapter very,very much. *gives cookies to Kendra James* Very awesome!! Keep updating and writing awesomeness!!!
Oh, wonderful! the Um-b***h will FINALLY get hers! Go Severus!
I loved Sev's eaction to post-it notes and I think Harry should tell Fred and Georgeto stock them in the store. I'm sure the twins will come up with a magic-ed version for joke purposes, too!
An excellent story! I'm looking forward to reading more.
| Title: Chapter 3
| 25 Jul 2010 8:44 pm
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| Reviewer: JAM (Anonymous)
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One of the things that didn't get dealt with in canon (at least not to my satisfaction) was Umbridge's treatment of Harry. I'm anxious to see how you handle it.
LOL! It's so cute that Snape loves those post-its!
I wouldn't want to be Umbridge when Snape gets a hold of her.
Can't wait for the next chappie. What I love most about this story, is your wonderful descriptions and how you delve so deeply into your characters' feelings. Lovely job.
Aw, poor Harry.
He was happier just being called, "Harry", than the potions that help heal him.
So happy you posted here. Wonderful story.
More please!!! It's very good and their reactions seem to be very much within character.
There's only a couple of spelling things here and there that caught my eye--distracting me a bit.
1. Chapter 2 - first paragraph, last word - should be "breathe" with an "e."
2. Chapter 3 - fourth paragraph - the bit about the water losing "it's heat . . ." - that should be "its" without the apostrophe. In that word, "it's" only ever means one thing: "it is."
Sorry if I'm being nit picky. I just think you're so close to being perfect already; why not take that final step?
Go get her! As a Ministry employee, Umbridge knew full well that she was committing a serious crime and that makes her offense even worse. I'm glad that Harry told Severus what she did and hope that he will be able to get Umbitch punished.
I think Harry is beginning to see that Severus has changed his attitude toward him and that will help build further trust. The knowledge that someone truly does care will do him a world of good.
| Title: Chapter 3
| 25 Jul 2010 11:09 am
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| Reviewer: missny1 (Anonymous)
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Finally someone caring about the use of a blood quill. I always thougth that particular punishment was way too overlooked. Great chatper.
| Title: Chapter 3
| 25 Jul 2010 9:17 am
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| Reviewer: DS (Anonymous)
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Good writing. I liked how you made Harry as a serious student rather than the mediocre one in the canon and also the whole thing with post its.
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