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Title: Chapter 3 12 Jan 2011 4:10 am
Reviewer: channeling_snape (Signed) [Report This]
    "reaping havoc" => WREAKING havoc

    "there was no reason to facilitate the grand room" => Facilitate? I think not. Open; utilize; employ; not facilitate.

    "patience stretched like rice paper" => Rice paper is actually quite inelastic. "patience stretched AS THIN AS rice paper" would be more appropriate .
Title: Chapter 2 12 Jan 2011 3:57 am
Reviewer: channeling_snape (Signed) [Report This]
    "He waived his wand " => WAVED his wand

    "what you planned on doing" => what you planned TO DO
    I do approve of your choice of transfiguration. Munitions to minnow.

    "Yes, more than less,” => Perhaps you meant "more OR less"?

    "A total are study can be longer" => Your intended meaning is indecipherable.
Title: Chapter 1 12 Jan 2011 3:46 am
Reviewer: channeling_snape (Signed) [Report This]
    "did not hesitate sharing his feelings" -> did not hesitate TO SHARE his feelings

    "Tthough" => Tsk. Should be "Though."

    “Severus escapes possibly the most unprecedented and invasive stampede through our privacy as a reward for being, on the whole, an arrogant bastard?” =>
    Music to my ears. If not for that meddling old fool...
Title: Chapter 5 12 Jan 2011 2:23 am
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Ooh, glad that you've updated!

    I'm so glad that harry passed the test, and that Harry kicked Snape's granpa's butt (figuratively speaking) LOL!

    Great chappie.
Title: Chapter 5 11 Jan 2011 10:30 pm
Reviewer: channeling_snape (Signed) [Report This]
    The first half of this chapter is not formatted. It is very difficult to read. If you are able to correct this and resubmit, please do so.

    Author's Response: Thanks, I will jump on that'
Title: Chapter 3 22 Aug 2010 3:50 am
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Great start to the story. I' m really intrigued. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Title: Chapter 2 22 Aug 2010 3:35 am
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Omg! This gets even better. I love it!

    Malfoy has Severus' father? I would NOT want to be him when Snape finds out.

    I love how Snape turned Vernon's gun into a fish. Hee hee.

    This story is wonderful. I'm off to the next chappie.
Title: Chapter 1 22 Aug 2010 3:13 am
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Omg, Severus is going to "kill" Dumbles! Yikes!

    I'm loving this story. Great beginning, and very unique and intriguing idea with this "Pulsing".

    Onto the next chappie.
Title: Chapter 3 22 Aug 2010 1:17 am
Reviewer: Severa (Signed) [Report This]
    So far I love this story and have been checking every day for updates! I agree with a few of the other reviewers about adding something to the story description - I think you would definitely get more readers. Anyways...just a suggestion. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Title: Chapter 3 21 Aug 2010 11:00 pm
Reviewer: snapeswidow (Signed) [Report This]
    great chapter!

    “Well, we still have the ceremony where we imbibe raw chicken livers before giving ourselves matching butterfly tattoos on our bums'' had me laughing my own bum off!LOL glad to see that snape can find some humor in this situation.

    can't wait fot the next chapter!
    ~shannon

    Author's Response: This is pretty late, but thankyou for the review.  Hope you enjoy the story.

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