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Reviews For Pulse
"there was no reason to facilitate the grand room" => Facilitate? I think not. Open; utilize; employ; not facilitate. "patience stretched like rice paper" => Rice paper is actually quite inelastic. "patience stretched AS THIN AS rice paper" would be more appropriate .
"what you planned on doing" => what you planned TO DO I do approve of your choice of transfiguration. Munitions to minnow. "Yes, more than less,” => Perhaps you meant "more OR less"? "A total are study can be longer" => Your intended meaning is indecipherable.
"Tthough" => Tsk. Should be "Though." “Severus escapes possibly the most unprecedented and invasive stampede through our privacy as a reward for being, on the whole, an arrogant bastard?” => Music to my ears. If not for that meddling old fool...
I'm so glad that harry passed the test, and that Harry kicked Snape's granpa's butt (figuratively speaking) LOL! Great chappie.
Author's Response: Thanks, I will jump on that'
Malfoy has Severus' father? I would NOT want to be him when Snape finds out. I love how Snape turned Vernon's gun into a fish. Hee hee. This story is wonderful. I'm off to the next chappie.
I'm loving this story. Great beginning, and very unique and intriguing idea with this "Pulsing". Onto the next chappie.
“Well, we still have the ceremony where we imbibe raw chicken livers before giving ourselves matching butterfly tattoos on our bums'' had me laughing my own bum off!LOL glad to see that snape can find some humor in this situation. can't wait fot the next chapter! ~shannon Author's Response: This is pretty late, but thankyou for the review. Hope you enjoy the story. |
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