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Reviews For Changing the Past
the way that Harry learns the real truth about his friends but also the way that nefarious plans of Al & Gill are revealed! That finally Harry gets to show that he's much more than just a brave Gryffindor...that he has elements of all houses within him. But just what will Harry do about his betrayers...because in the past they won't have betrayed him yet?
It so easy to see Dumbledore being such a manipulative, twisted git and him an Grindelwald being the root cause of all of the wizarding worlds problems, even for Tom Riddle becoming Voldemort. And for what did they do this, greed and power...for there both certainly as mad as hatters! But how did they manage to twist all of Harry's supposed friends into playing along with them? Just how long had they truly been Harry's friends, or were those meetings so contrived by Dumbledore's manipulations as well.
Some problems, though, prevent one from enjoying the story to the fullest extent. Grindelwald's name was Gellert, not Gillert. Also, there are some issues with your sentences. For example, "I am sorry Harry for everything." Should be I am sorry, Harry, for everything. There are a lot of sentences like this that are missing commas. I think this would be an awesome story with those little things fixed, great job! I hope to see more from you in the future. |
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