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Reviews For Common Interests
I really enjoyed this chapter, finding it exciting and satisfying--even the cliffhanger ending! As always, your characters feel so real, and I always feel that I have a stake in the outcome of their lives within your tales. Thanks again for bringing Skullduggery home just in time to save the day! In regards to McKinnon's fate... I'm for the trial and the Dementor's Kiss... Mainly because I don't want Sev to be accused of murder and vigilante behavior. Leaving her in Azkaban for life has the same potential problem as happened in canon when the Deatheaters attacked to free their fellows. Yet, taking her up to the castle to await the Aurors could also mean that the revenant that she's sent out could be summoned to rescue her... assuming that it won't take advantage of her situation to free itself from her... Hmmmm. If it frees itself from her, it could be a horrible thing for Hogwarts as it goes to feed itself... I can't see the students being able to protect themselves from it, and Albus, Minerva and Severus can't be everywhere all at once.... Hmmmm. I don't envy you the plot complications no matter which option that you pick for the next chapter! I know that I say this every time I review one of your chapters, but it's true and I have to repeat it again: Well done!
I love that Skull has returned too! Please don't make Severus kill Marlene. I hate Marlene in your story, but she's lost her family and is unhinged. Also, I don't really want to see Sev become a murderer. My best wishes to your mum, I hope she recovers soon. Thanks for this awesome chappie!
Harry is holding up well. Severus and Skull will be furious when he hears of what Marlene has done to their boy. Stay strong, Harry, stay strong! Author's Response: Yes, it's in the next few chapters. Thanks so much for saying that! Since I got another review over on ff.net where the person complained that it was taking too long to get Harry rescued and it was boring. In my opinion, when you have a person get kidnapped or captured by the enemy in a story, it's because you want certain things to happen to the characters which makes them grow or change or develop new abilties, ect . . .You also want to pue challenges in the path of your protaganists, and having Harry kidnapped and rescued within two chapters is pointless. Then there's no tension, no room for the character to experience anything except maybe a few minutes of fear, and unless the bad guys were planning to execute him, no challenges to overcome. In real life people go missing for weeks, months, and years. Sometimes you never find them. Or when you do find them, they're forever changed by the experience . . . or worse, they're dead. And while I won't kill off Harry here, I do want him to learn from the experience, and develop certain aspects of his magic and that resilience to bad things happening. I also want to show that not only Severus, but other students and teachers also care for Harry, and that sometimes, the good guys don't always have all the answers at once, and a good rescue attempt takes time, planning, and patience and it's not always as easy as cast a Locator Charm and here he is! Some kidnappers are stupid like that, but Marlene isn't. And Sev's not Superman, he has limitations too. So it's not going to be just Severus alone who rescues Harry, but Severus working together with Lena, Irma, Skull . . .ect and even the book and Harry will all play their parts. Harry's not a damsel in distress, he's going to try his hardest to save himself and not just sit there on his bum waiting for Severus to bust through the door and blow away Marlene. And right now he's being very clever and Slytherin like. Sev ought to be proud!
Looking forward, as usual, to your next update. Thanks for sharing! V. Author's Response: it could if Harry was studying it all on his own, but the book will help him learn faster. Thanks for reviewing!
Author's Response: Yes, it sort of is. Lily was influenced by Marlene to reject Severus. You mean, you fear Marlene will hurt Harry more than she already has? Like maybe altering his memories too?
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