Title: If Memory Serves
| 08 Dec 2020 10:26 pm
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Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you an intriguing start
I'm hooked.
Author's Response: Great to hear! Thanks so much for leaving a review! I love it when people review when a story is done. Cheers!
Well done I look forward to the last cahpter.
Title: If Memory Serves
| 06 Dec 2010 4:50 am
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Reviewer: Daffodil (Anonymous)
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Oooh, really great beginning! I can't wait to see what's wrong with Harry, and what Snape has to do with it!
Ouuuuu... I love it! Fantastic beginning. I am intrigued!!
Sounds interesting! I think I could really enjoy this! And yes, I agree. Pity from Snape is not a good thing. Not at all.
I wonder what could be the matter with Harry?
Looking forward to your next update. :-)
Title: If Memory Serves
| 04 Dec 2010 3:41 pm
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Reviewer: Shadow (Anonymous)
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Interesting start. I'm curious what is with Harry...I hope he will be ok.
Well, you certainly have my curiosity piqued! I am wondering whether everything in this chapter is really happening and Harry's been hit by a curse or been poisoned or if this is all essentially a figment of his imagination (either from dreaming, or being the effects of a curse or poison, etc). In either case, things certainly don't look good for our hero.
You have a nice writing style and the characterizations are quite good. Yes, you had a lot of things going on in this chapter but it didn't feel like it was crammed in with a shoe horn. You made efficient use of the length without resorting to dropping anvils to get the clues across to the reader. And bless you for not falling into the laundry list/unnecessary use of excessive adjectives form of descriptions. I had no trouble identifying time, place, what the characters were feeling. Your style here is eminently readable. Bravo!
I'm really looking forward to the upcoming chapters.
Author's Response: Ooh, I'm liking the theories. Glad you liked it!
Boy, I am thinking that Voldie is playing with Harry's mind.
Looking forward to more
Oooo What is happening to Harry!
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