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Reviews For Somnum Aeternum
Author's Response: Thanks so much, that makes life waaayy easier for me! :) I will make the transition for next story though, that way you don't have to change things all the time.
In most of online fan-based literature the double quotation marks are used for speaking and the single quotation marks are generally used for thoughts, or thought speech. Italics can also be used for thoughts, but italics can revert to plain text unintentionally... which is extremely distressing when you don't intend it to. :} I did not know that there were choices for quotation marks, I will have to add double quotation marks to the list of submission rules as the choice of style on this archive. :) I would really appreciate it if you would follow this style so that the text will be more uniform on the site, and so that readers won't become confused when reading. Plus, it probably also helps the archive seem a bit more professional if all the styles matched. The nicer the site seems, the better reputation we get through word of mouth, and therefore the more readers and reviews! :) Thanks for your response! Author's Response: Well, I guess if it will be a submission rule soon I should follow that! It'll be hard though, I've been writing this way for a very very long time, so I might slip up occasionally. The only thing though with this story is that I've already gotten pretty much three quarters written (not just what I've posted) and I honestly haven't got time to change all the quotation marks, and I would probably confuse people if I changed things halfway through this story. Would you be ok if I made the change for my next story? I might normally have the time to make a lot of changes, but finals are fast approaching and I have a lot of work to do already! :)
I am enjoying the concern Snape has for Harry, but it did seem that Snape and Harry's relationship changed too quickly. Even though it is written to say that it happened over time, it still feels sudden and a bit out of character for both Harry and Snape. Harry because the years of meanness on Snape's part is not really dealt with (Harry likes Snape and has a close relationship with him and we are left wondering how it happened, how Harry overcame the years of hatred and cruelty). Also, I have noticed that readers tend to appreciate and understand a harsher, more canon Snape better, and if he is to be softened it has to be done slowly and with enough strong reasoning on his part to make it work otherwise authors may get flames. The readers on this site tend to be very nice, but readers on other sites may not be as kind. The issue of their growing closeness was addressed in this chapter, but maybe more development would make the transition of their relationship easier to understand and relate to. :) You don't have to change anything, it's just something to think about for the next story. I noticed that you are using apostrophes instead of quotation marks for speaking. ' instead of ". It's a bit distracting when trying to read and I think it is detracting from the story and your writing. Please use the " quotation marks. Also, please make sure that you are using commas instead of periods after speaking when you explain who was speaking like so: "I don't know," Harry said. Your use of question marks and exclamation marks is correct when the characters are speaking. :) For a resource see this website Punctuating Dialogue: How to Punctuate Dialogue Correctly. The Potions and Snitches archive has rules about stories having correct grammar and punctuation. I made some corrections in this chapter to fix the punctuation issues and a spelling mistake (assumme should me assume). Please look over this chapter and note the changes. When you feel ready please go back and edit your previous chapters. If you need help please just let me know. :) I used blockquotes to make the letter appear different, like it's on parchment. I really like this story and hope that more is coming soon! It's very compelling. I enjoy your characterization of Snape very much. Thank you for writing and sharing this story with us. Author's Response: Hey there, thanks for all the pointers! Especially the comma thing. About the quotation marks however, either way is considered correct, although double quotations are generally used in the US. Single quotation marks are generally used in British literature, such as the works of Terry Pratchett, J.R.R Tolkied and the Harry Potter books (British versions of course). Though I live in Canada, I sort of adopeted that style. Because a lot of my teachers didn't bother to teach writing in detail, I studied books for examples, and it just so happens that many of my favorite authors are from Britain. The single quotation style just seems to make more sense to me and so I really hope you don't mind if I continue to write in that manner, though lots of people on this site are probably used to the US style. I really appreciate the feedback, and I'll do my very best to fix the errors I have made, though It might take a while due to the large quantities of homework I have been given. In response to you saying that Snape and Harry's relationship was a little rushed, sorry if you didn't care for that; it seemed better when I wrote it. I also wanted to make things go quicker so that Harry could find out what was wrong with him faster, and people wouldn't be so confused. Oh, and the blockquotes, thank you! I haven't a clue how to do those, I really am dreadful with techonlogy. It takes me ages to figure things out, I'm only just starting to figure out how to use a cell phone, and you'd think a teenager would have plently of knowledge in this area! Thanks for everything!
Author's Response: That does seem to fit ... you'll just have to wait and see though!
Maybe something went wrong after Harry took the red pill - lol ;) |
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