Aww, poor Harry! I felt so bad for him. Good job on giving the Dursleys what they deserve.
*giggles* What wonderful justice. Petunia & Vernon get what's coming to them. :-D
Severus hugged Harry? Wonderful!!
I am very much! Go Icefyre!
the revenge was great, the Dursleys got off easy in the books, they should have at least been made to apologize to harry for all the years they mistreated him. Realistically, they belonged in jail. I always like when they're made to regret their treatment of Harry, one way or another.
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| 12 Jan 2011 2:24 am
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| Reviewer: hawkswench (Anonymous)
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| Title: A Boy's Worth
| 11 Jan 2011 11:09 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Great chapter they deserve every bit of it thank you
So I just thought I should clarify my stand, I didn't think there was anything wrong with the plot, how the characters reacted and what they did to Petunia.
I think you would know from the support you have that your stories are awesome. It wasn't much of details I thought the stories lacked, but maybe more of the thing with writing style?
I not explaining clearly, am I? Well, if you don't think I'm making any sense, just ignore this.
What, an entire chapter without a magical super-creature driving the action? Well done. Nicely creative curse.
great chapter, looking forward to the next.
Ooooh, sounds er...revengeful? lols. I thought your stories were always very creative, but if you don't mind a bit of a criticism, I think the stories could do with a bit more elaboration instead of sounding like a script in which actors just say the lines and act out the actions:D
Just a thought
Author's Response: I'm not exactly sure what you mean by that. I try and put lots of emotion and description into my stories and don't know how much more elaborate I could get without becoming boring. I take it you didn't like the way this chapter played out. I don't know how much more detail you wanted into Petunia's unreasoning resentment/hatred/prejudice of both Lily and Harry, in this story she's like the books, a nasty person who treats her nephew like dirt and favors her own son. Or maybe you didn't like how Snape, Albus and Harry reacted to her. Harry didn't go all nuts on her because he was expecting her to say something like that and he was also a bit in shock and Snape and Dumbledore aren't the kind of people who scream at others, Snape's casting of the extra curse and the Silence spell were what I thought of a signs of extreme anger for him. The hug at the end was awkward because Harry and Severus do not share the same past as they did in some of my other stories and so behave differently. Again, I don't know exactly what you're implying, unless it's that you think I'm not protraying the characters reactons correctly.
This is great - really enjoying this story
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