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Reviews For Victus per Reproba Monumentum
Loving this, so far.
I liked the descriptions and emotions in this chapter. Things seemed a little bit blank though, mostly the other characters when Snape and Harry were talking and the other characters didn't notice anything. It didn't seem that believable. It might work better if Harry hadn't been able to get into the kitchen. It doesn't seem as if going into the kitchen added anything to the situation, and it makes the adult's lack of interest and notice distracting while reading. It seemed out of character for Remus, Molly and Dumbledore to not notice as they are the three adults who seem the most interested in Harry's care. Otherwise, I like your Snape. He is very Snapish, and situation Harry has himself in is very intriguing. I like your Remus, and I want to listen to more of Snape's thoughts. Good job on that. :)
Author's Response: I too loved their first interaction together. Thanks for the review.
Author's Response: Glad you're enjoying the story.
I'm chuckling at Remus' reaction. It's obvious that Snape is having very conflicting feelings over Harry, but he's not sure why. Great chappie as usual. Author's Response: Thank you. |
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