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Reviews For Promise of a Lifetime
I'd love to see a longer version, with greater scene and character development. To have a better mental image of the scenes, it'd help to hear a bit more about what the character's are doing when not engaged in dialogue. For example, how do the others react to that conversation between Severus and Petunia? Also, besides Molly, no one reacts to Severus' condition - is it a normal occurence to them, or do they not care? And why was he injured? The moment with Severus singing to Harry is so magical...it could be developed a little more, too. It'd be nice to have him sing again, in the end, for example, to show how happy he is. Lily could join in, and magic could happen. The idea of Vis Vinco was beautiful - it'd be nice to see the implications for their current lives. How much did Sev and Lily know about their power before? Did they ever summon a doe? The details showing Lily and Severus hesitant to pursue their relationship are touching, too. I'd like to see a bit more conflict - how did they get to the point where they felt okay with sleeping with each other? I'm not convinced they would have shared a room from the beginning, either, trying to respect the vows and be mindful of Harry's feelings. The Tobias scene was interesting - perhaps you could touch on the subject a couple more times between the Tuney's comment in the beginning and when he arrives at the house? And how did people react to Tuney's comments? Also, did Lily age during the time she was in 'limbo'? And what are the implications when Voldemort returns and Snape must take up spying? Hope you don't mind me sharing all these thoughts. Keep writing! I'm looking forward to seeing what you do next! Author's Response: Thank you very much for taking time out of your day to leave me such a kind review. I really do appreciate it. In response to your request of this story being longer, I'm not sure if I will find time to make it longer. You're very correct with the fact that I could have developed it so much more and delved into more of the scenes. The only issue is that I have 4 WIP that I'm attempting to update regularly again. So I'm not sure if I will have time to delve into this story again. If I do update this story again, I'm sure you'll get the alert. But for now, I'm just saying it's finished. Hopefully, I'll find some time to add more to it sometime. Thanks again for writing me such a nice review about your thoughts and hopes for the future of this fic. I'm very appreciative. Thank you. :)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Glad you enjoyed it.
Author's Response: Thanks, Autumn. Glad you liked it. :D
And I'm a huge fan of Kutless. I went to see them in concert with the Newsboys, and am waiting for Winter Jam to get close to my area to see them both again Author's Response: Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :D
hehehe...that made me giggle... :D I love the awkwardness between SNape and Harry in the basement! Very nice Lan! OH! And I've very happy Lily is coming to live with Snape at Hogwarts! :D Thank you so much Lan! REally, I couldn't have asked for a better story. I absolutely love it! *hugs her soul sister* Author's Response: You're welcome, DA. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I just felt that it'd be awkward to leave her all by herself there for the term so I had to keep the family united. Glad you liked it.
I really did like the idea, and there are a lot of really great things that were explored, like Lily and Harry moving in with Snape, Harry's hatred over everything. Snape trying to be a nicer person. Changing because Lily is around. Harry running away... Loved all those things. I guess I just wanted more angst and drama. :) I thought that Snape and Harry's dialogue and speak patterns were done very well. They seemed in character. I enjoyed reading about their characters and relationship. Just wish that there were more! :) Author's Response: I admit it. I can't write a nice Lily, Jan. That was my best attempt, and she came out fluffy. I think the main reason why we didn't see everything (like Snape and Harry working on fixing the house, bonding and all that) is because I somewhat rushed this story. However, I had thought that I had a good balance of all three of them. *hangs head* I guess not. Thanks for the review. |
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