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Reviews For Promise of a Lifetime
I'd love to see a longer version, with greater scene and character development. To have a better mental image of the scenes, it'd help to hear a bit more about what the character's are doing when not engaged in dialogue. For example, how do the others react to that conversation between Severus and Petunia? Also, besides Molly, no one reacts to Severus' condition - is it a normal occurence to them, or do they not care? And why was he injured? The moment with Severus singing to Harry is so magical...it could be developed a little more, too. It'd be nice to have him sing again, in the end, for example, to show how happy he is. Lily could join in, and magic could happen. The idea of Vis Vinco was beautiful - it'd be nice to see the implications for their current lives. How much did Sev and Lily know about their power before? Did they ever summon a doe? The details showing Lily and Severus hesitant to pursue their relationship are touching, too. I'd like to see a bit more conflict - how did they get to the point where they felt okay with sleeping with each other? I'm not convinced they would have shared a room from the beginning, either, trying to respect the vows and be mindful of Harry's feelings. The Tobias scene was interesting - perhaps you could touch on the subject a couple more times between the Tuney's comment in the beginning and when he arrives at the house? And how did people react to Tuney's comments? Also, did Lily age during the time she was in 'limbo'? And what are the implications when Voldemort returns and Snape must take up spying? Hope you don't mind me sharing all these thoughts. Keep writing! I'm looking forward to seeing what you do next! Author's Response: Thank you very much for taking time out of your day to leave me such a kind review. I really do appreciate it. In response to your request of this story being longer, I'm not sure if I will find time to make it longer. You're very correct with the fact that I could have developed it so much more and delved into more of the scenes. The only issue is that I have 4 WIP that I'm attempting to update regularly again. So I'm not sure if I will have time to delve into this story again. If I do update this story again, I'm sure you'll get the alert. But for now, I'm just saying it's finished. Hopefully, I'll find some time to add more to it sometime. Thanks again for writing me such a nice review about your thoughts and hopes for the future of this fic. I'm very appreciative. Thank you. :)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Glad you enjoyed it.
And secondly: It's the typical argument justifying Snape's classroom person with to say that brewing was so dangerous blablabla.... While that sounds reasonable enough at first glance, his actions are not conclusive with that! A frightened child is more likely to make mistakes (Neville comes to mind...). Furthermore, if safety was Snape's first priority, he'd make sure that his Slytherins didn't get away with throwing things into other students' cauldrons!!! And lauding those who do poor jobs (Goyle comes to mind...) while putting down others who actually do better jobs (Hermione could be mentioned, but also Harry and Ron are better brewers than somke of the Snakes), doesn't lead to a higher level of security. It would be a lot more convincing, if Snapes just confessed that he's been taking out his frustration and bitterness on most of his students (and mostly on Harry, just because he resembles his father - and yes! Snape started it - Harry's just been reacting to the treatment he received from him. And even if he reacted childishly - well, he is a child and Snape's supposed to be an adult and a teacher at that!). So, if Snape wants to get at Harry's good side, he should just swallow his pride and admit that the fault's on him! Sorry, just had to vent a little, because these two things disturbed an otherwise exquisitely enjoyable reading experience. Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Pellegrina. I'm glad that you're liking it thus far. In response to your points, I never specify that Harry was abused. He's not appreciated by them by any means, but he's not abused in this story. Granted, yes, Harry did live in a cupboard for 10 years and was called a freak. So, yes, likely I should have included a scene with Lily get enraged about that, but I'd assume that Harry would feel ashamed to tell his mother about that and, well, Petunia calling people freaks isn't anything new. So Lily doesn't really know about the cupboard and this Harry has built up a tolerance you could say to Petunia calling him a freak. The table scene in the beginning is the only place where we see any implication that Harry was not appreciated, but this Harry is by no means physically abused as seen in a lot of fics. As you yourself mentioned it was the 'typical argument.' I just used that for that scene. However, later, when Snape and Harry have a bit of a bonding session, we do get to see Snape apologize for his behavior. It's just a little bit later in the fic. Again, thank you very much for the review.
I love the graveyard scene, Lan! Wonderful! Absolutely beautiful! LOL I"m sure it made all the Lily fans very happy, too. Author's Response: Thanks, DA. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :D
Author's Response: Thanks. :D
Wonderful Lan! I know I've already said it, but I love how you have Snape save Christmas. 'Twas a great idea! :D Author's Response: Yes, your idea was pretty brilliant. :D Thanks for the review.
Excellent! I still love too, btw. :D Author's Response: Thanks. :D I'm glad you love it.
Author's Response: Thanks, Autumn. Glad you liked it. :D
Author's Response: Lily has to work because she doesn't have access to those funds. While she should by all means have access because of her marriage to James, the goblins are refusing to release it to her because the dead do not return to collect money. I'll add a scene about that. Thanks for the question. :D In response to her going out into public, I'd have to say that Voldie is likely concentrating on other things like terrorizing Europe than worrying about a person he knows he murdered. Thanks for the review and questions. I appreciate knowing that I have some holes to fill. :D
Author's Response: I ignored Vernon in this fic. However, you will continue to see Petunia and Lily together and a brief mention of Petunia's thoughts on her sister's return. In reference to Lily being tame, she's in shock. In her mind, it is still 1981, which will take awhile to get used to that it's not. Thanks for the review. |
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