| Title: Chapter 9: Snape's Trial
| 15 Feb 2011 10:12 pm
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| Reviewer: Morgana (Signed)
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Loved this chapter; Hufflepuff house certainly suits Harry's true nature and is particularly apt due to the wand. I really liked the court scene, which had some lovely twists (although English Barristers don't shout objection, nor do English Judges use a gavel; it's all rather restrained and formulaic lol!) I love the names Harry gave his animals and the interplay between Kingsley, Tobias and Harry. Oh, and Having Aberforth as a judge was inspired; in personality, he's certainly a good fit for a number of Judges I know ^^. All in all, a great, original little story which is well written, believable and heartwarming.
I loved the hairbrush scene; giving Harry the light pats was much better than simply refusing to beat him as, in Harry's mind it allowed the other shoe to drop and showed him that he had no need to fear. Very interesting use of the regression potion in proving Sirus' innocence. The scene at the end was a nice twist; very interested in seeing how this will play out. One way or another, I feel Severus and Tobias will have their revenge on GM
Very interesting info about Sirius Black's escape and death (if that was, indeed, his body they found) and Lily's relationship with and letters to Severus. The grave scene was very touching. I'm really enjoying Harry and Severus' and Tobias and Severus' interaction
| Title: Chapter 6: A Famous Person
| 15 Feb 2011 9:33 pm
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| Reviewer: Morgana (Signed)
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Very interesting chapter; loved the twist with the wand- it was completely unexpected and Severus' reaction felt very in character (as did Harry's; now that he's feeling more secure, he's sure to test the boundaries). I'm very interested in seeing where you're going with this plot!
WOW! What a chapter! I can't say I'm sad to see the Dursley' dead,but I do feel a little bad for dudley.
Harry must be really 'strong' to have been able to keep himself hidden from the DE's!
Poor Harry. I hope Sev can save him, without Harry have any permanant ill effects from his nearly drained magic
| Title: Chapter 5: Of Magic and Truth
| 15 Feb 2011 9:25 pm
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| Reviewer: Morgana (Signed)
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I absolutely love how you've portrayed Tobias and his interaction with Harry; it's sweet but also very realistic. I'm also really enjoying Severus' backstory and I like his internal struggle over Harry vis a vis his paternity. Great Chapter. Harry's needle phobia was also a great plot device to build his relationship with Severus
Awww that was awesome! loved it. :D
| Title: Chapter 4: Nightmares and Bedtime Stories
| 15 Feb 2011 9:16 pm
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| Reviewer: Morgana (Signed)
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Very interesting chapter; Harry and Severus' interaction was very realistic, though I'm not sure about the timeline- didn't you say that, between 3 and 10, Severus was living with Gil Malfoy instead of at Spinners End? Also, given Severus' thoughts on introducing Harry slowly to the magical world, he seems to have changed his mind half-way through the chapter(in that he introduces magic, which is clearly a contentious subject with Harry) when Harry needs to relax; a portrayal of his thought processes might be helpful. Otherwise, a really great chapter; I love how you have Tobias (who has been through it all before) helping Severus to help Harry.
| Title: Chapter 3: First Talks
| 15 Feb 2011 7:57 pm
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| Reviewer: shadowienne (Anonymous)
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This chapter felt a bit prickly at first, with Harry feeling afraid and denying his magic, but it ended up wonderfully warm and fuzzy! :-)
| Title: Chapter 2: Unspeakable Discovery
| 15 Feb 2011 7:35 pm
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| Reviewer: shadowienne (Anonymous)
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The first two chapters are a terrific beginning to the story! I love the idea of Severus as an Unspeakable! And that he's a Seer! And that his magic is so specialized! And I think it's awesome that Harry himself has powerful magic, so powerful that he could fool Death Eaters! Wow! And now Severus has to save him... Fantastic work so far! :-)
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