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Title: Chapter 1: Fickle Caprice 07 Mar 2011 8:09 pm
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    What a great first chapter! Ron, Harry, and Severus are well IC and I love how the boys act with each other and with Severus. They are the perfect blend of mischief and curiosity and daring. Love how Snape handles them too, he's a great dad. His scene with Ron when Ron wanted to run away was wonderful and so was the way he handled Harry's jealousy! What a lovely present to find when I came back from my vacation! Thanks!

    Author's Response:

    Thanks SnapeGirl!! I had been waiting for a word from u since this was written for u ...  I was really scared that maybe, u dint like it since your own stories are so much better and heartfelt always - u are like the king/queen of childfic genre.  

    Thanks so much,

    Lia 

Title: Chapter 1: Fickle Caprice 04 Mar 2011 2:55 am
Reviewer: Lady Lanera (Signed) [Report This]
    Nice first chapter, Lia. The boys are very cute with each other. I had to laugh with Harry's way of telling Ron that Snape was bluffing. :)

    Author's Response:

    I imagined Sirius having taught him the cards game sometime ... Harry uses that.

    Thanks again, Lady 

Title: Chapter 1: Fickle Caprice 03 Mar 2011 4:42 pm
Reviewer: shadowienne (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Whoa! What an incredibly-detailed chapter, Lia! Not only description, but especially the childhood logic, emotions, physical action on the boys' part, as well as Snape's chess logic toward Ron, and careful reasoning with each boy in turn. And then there are the TWINS! Poor Mr. and Mrs. Weasley! I'm absolutely blown away by the beginning of your story-- I don't know where you will take us next, but it looks to be an exciting RIDE! (I TOLD you that you were a writer! -- Definitely do rewrite your other story; you CAN do it. Go, Lia! Go, Lia!)

    Author's Response:

    Thanks Shadowienne!

    Would you believe it if I told you that I actuallylost the 2nd chapter of this story as well and had to rewrite it entirely? I had even attached it to my email account and saved as a draft, then made changes in the draft directly - somewhere , sometime, did Ctrl-A, Space and saved the draft ... there went my chapter :) Realised it only when I was sending it to Wands for beta-ing.

    I was so ashamed of myself- can't tell you :) but wrote it back cus there was a deadline ( Which I anyway missed by a more than a fortnight).

    I have always been in dire need of a good editor who could go snip snip snip on my ramblings - for that is what they become when I start getting so detailed. Need to learn the art of minimal writing and letting it be open to interpretations. 

     I am so happy to see your review and so glad that you liked it despite all the weaknesses.

    Thanks to your awesome support and that of other members here, I actually managed to push this through. I will deff try to rewrite the other story's chap as well.

    Thanks again for leaving such a kind review and your support.

    Lia 

Title: Chapter 1: Fickle Caprice 03 Mar 2011 6:16 am
Reviewer: Min (Anonymous) [Report This]
    GReat job!

    Author's Response: Thanks!
Title: Chapter 1: Fickle Caprice 03 Mar 2011 1:48 am
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Good start Lia.

    Will we get to find out more about how Snape got custody of Harry, and why he calls him "Uncle"?

    Those twins are incorrigible! LOL! Imagine making their house disappear!

    Onto the next chappie. Good work.

    Author's Response:

    Hey Pandora,

    Thanks for leaving chap-wise reviews.

    I myself wd have to think abt the custody thing. As far as 'Uncle' is concerned, Harry's not Snape's son and so, calls him Uncle. He is used to that.

    Poor twins - flattening themselves was really bad! Hope they learn to find out more about their experiments before actually doing them the next time. It's a dangerous and stupid thing.

    Thanks again for leaving a review.

    Lia 

Title: Chapter 1: Fickle Caprice 02 Mar 2011 8:40 pm
Reviewer: Morgana (Signed) [Report This]
    Lovely chapter; I really like this premise- I can see how easily Fred and George could do something that silly (given their inventive streak). Ron's feelings are brilliantly portrayed (you've captured his character perfectly) and his arguement with Harry felt very realistic. I also love your depiction of Severus; he's not quite the canon Severus (he wouldn't be after 4 yrs of fatherhood) but he has many of 'canon-Snape's' characteristics. Well written and entertaining

    Author's Response:

    Hey Morgana,

    Thanks so much! I keep finding mistakes and problems and wishing to change it all the time so the compliments are really confidence boosting. I am extremely bad with writing kids and i owe a lot to my beta as well, Wands. See, that reminds me, I need to put in the disclaimer and Thanks to beta! I am glad you found the chapter entertaining :)

    Also, I had pretty much given up on Snape halfway through the fic. His most defining point is his irascible nature, at least towards kids and that has gone for a toss here. I tried to inculcate a little sarcasm, but I don't do it well and lost subtlety somewhere during the flow as also, downplayed his language. So, I am really glad to hear that this character could be rationalised to be a new-and-improved Snape somehow. I had given up hope.

    Thanks for leaving a review once again.

    Lia 

     


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