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Reviews For The Summer of '89
I liked how Snape dealt with the boys, especially Ron, at breakfast, and the clock was really funny. I could see it being thrown out a window by Ron sometime in the future. I also liked how they watched cartoons, I grew up with all of them and it brings back sso many memories. I love how Snape uses Inspector Gadget, one of my favs, to get Harry to smile. His response to Harry saying he hated him was also very good. I also liked his explanation of why Ron couldn't stay with his mum and Ginny and his patience in dealing with the bickering. The church was good too, I can see them going there on Sunday like regular Muggles, since JKR did say that wizards believed in God in an interview, so why wouldn't they go to church? Chapel was an important part of a morning routine in most private schools in England, like Eton and Harrow, they have beautiful churches there. Can't wait to see what happens next and hope you can continue this soon! I'm loving it! Author's Response: Thanks again! I was so scared that Inspector Gadget being so British, half of the readers wont get the context - also they are so old. Thank you for leaving a review....
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Author's Response: Hey, you made it thru the chapter - it won't stop to surprise me when people make it thru the lengthy 2nd chapter, which hardly has any dialogue.... I have already rewritten it but not sure how to edit it here so will post it on ffnet now. Actually, that was exactly the thought in my mind - I had quite a few summers to get into any and all sorts of troubles ... My parents used to send us to this sports club every day in the morning and instead of actually playing lawn tennis/table tennis/volley ball/swimming, we would be found running around the trees and climbing the trees that surrounded the club! he he!! I remember, once, we 6 kids decided that we wanted to go to the top of this hill at some distance from our neighbourhood. Up we woke at 6 in the morn, told each of our parents that we were going for jogging and we went up the hill. We returned only around 11 a.m and told our parents that we had been playing. We were hardly 7 years old then. I told my Mum this just last year, when she was sitting with the mother of another one of those 6 of us. Ha ha! You shd have looked at both of them! These days, parents completely time-manage their kids. It's good in a way too - you get to learn a lot of stuff - dance/music/sports - classes after classes. I am glad that it evoked your childhood memories. Snape is trying to do exactly that. Keep them busy as he works from home or when he goes to work. Thanks for such a lovely review. Lia
Author's Response: Thanks hpfanfic!
Good story Lia. Looking forward to next chapter. Author's Response: Thanks Pandora. I had tips from Wands to change the way Harry sounded - though I still think that he needs to stop being so confrontational with Ron. Also, I think he's a bit too mercurial. Before the next chap, I need to reedit this chap and include more dialogue. I am delighted to hear that u were able to read thru the chap - it's so boring right now. Thanks so much for leaving a review. Do continue to leave your suggestions and comments behind. Lia
Author's Response: Thanks again Morgana! You made it thru the chappie? It's a nightmare with so little dialogue and no partitions. Need to reedit it. I am glad you liked the conversation between Harry and Snape. I was really not sue abt it - thought that it sounded too forced and not at all natural.
Thanks again, Morgana!
No wonder he is acting up. Author's Response: Thanks graynavare. I thought to show him a little clingy, therefore, Snape deciding on the attic cleaning so that Ron didn't feel left out. Snape is in as tricky a situation where he has been saddled with a child and can't even act out for the fear of influencing Harry negatively. Harry and Snape's summer routine has changed along with Ron's. Glad u cd read thru the chap, it badly needs some more dialogue to break up the monotonous long stretches of paragraphs. Wd have to rewrite it, I guess! Thanks a load for leaving a review, Lia
Author's Response: Hi Achilles, Umm... I am not sure how much of the background I'ld be able to bring in - maybe, over a period of time, if I could manage it. The challenge just said that Harry and Ron are both under Snape's guardianship, temporary or otherwise, and that Snape must not be a spy. For Snape not to be a spy, I decided that the war is over and Snape was clearly on the side of Light, Snape, therefore, kept some contact with Lily and Pettigrew was captured. So, Sirius is free. I would have to think up the details.. hmm..... I was more worried abt Ron coming under Snape's guardianship this time.
Thanks for the review. I did not want to submit, thnking that the 2nd chapter is really long and dreary.... glad you liked it. Even gladder that you left a review. Thanks, Lia |
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