| Title: Clues
| 01 Aug 2013 7:52 am
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| Reviewer: Abq 1974 (Anonymous)
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Have you abandoned this story? I hope you have not and you update it... Its great!
| Title: Clues
| 17 Jun 2013 2:23 am
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| Reviewer: Miranda (Anonymous)
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hmmmm I wonder what Lily will do when she sees the picture of the house. Will Severus take the job?
Why do I have the feeling that Lily isn't telling Severus something and its has to do with Harry and being his dad? I don't know why but something in this chapter had me thinking about that.
| Title: Promises Kept
| 30 May 2013 4:07 am
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| Reviewer: me! (Anonymous)
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pleassssse update i am almost dying from the wait!!!!
This story is the reason I made an account on this site :)
| Title: Clues
| 26 May 2013 3:28 am
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| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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Thanks for updating this wonderful story! The characterization is great. Harry is completely adorable, and Severus is more stern, strong, and accurately written than normally seen, yet Lily seems to be almost the third wheel. Her relationships with Harry and Severus are decently explored but, to me, shes not showing enough inner growth. Because of her imprisonment it is probably fair to say that she is damaged but she does not seem to be dealing with it fully yet. Maybe that will happen later and Lily is just repressing it so far, but I do feel that there is something a bit missing is Lily. That said, everything else in the story couldn't be better. I love how you have included learning disorders in your story because many people seem unaware of how they affect day to day life. Even if the learning disorder is not dyslexia or another related real life condition, and you do decide to make it a magically based issue, it still was pretty unique and it is a pretty creative and door opening way to develop the plot and the possible relationships between the characters. Hopefully through learning how to best assist with challanges the condition and by teaching Harry, Severus will gain a new perspective and his bond with Harry will grow. Sorry for rambling and I hope I did not offend you. I only review and critique stories I think are exceptional so there is a comliment! I cannot wait for your next update!
| Title: Clues
| 22 May 2013 9:09 pm
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| Reviewer: Kakashi (Anonymous)
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Nice chapter!
I hope Sev can help Harry after reading the book and has more patience with him.
I have the impression that Harry wants to have Sev's approval. I don't know why but Harry obeys Sev like the man is his father. I really like that and I hope they have father-son relationships soon!
Please update soon with an excellent chapter!
Kakashi
Author's Response: Kakashi, thanks very much. I'm glad you liked it! :)
interesting chapter, nice to see harry and sev bonding whilst cooking
please update soon
Author's Response: Thank you for your comment. I'm glad you're enjoying it!
I'm very interested in thedevelopments this storyhas given your choice of characters. The sheer humanity you'vegiven each character has drawn in my interest. I'm hoping to see more soon. Thanks.
Author's Response: Luna Phase, thank you! That was such a nice comment. :)
| Title: Asphodel
| 10 May 2013 12:09 pm
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| Reviewer: Tiffany (Anonymous)
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Does it bother anybody else that Lilly seems to be replacing James with Snape? If I were Harry I would have been a heck of a lot less accepting of the situation then he is. I'm really surprised that Harry has not yet pulled the "You're not my father" card on Snape. It seems really out of charecter for him to be so accepting of Snapes authority.
Author's Response: Thanks for your comment, Tiffany. I appreciate your feedback on the characterization.
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