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Reviews For Whispers in the Dark
Author's Response: Aww, thank YOU, Fmh! :D
A few things to think about. Your scene selection. For example, you made a big deal about the doctor's office exam, but when the exam came it took place off the page and there was quite a bit of talk about the library yet we don't see Harry and Severus in the library. I thought for sure that scene was going to play into how Harry mentioned earlier he wasn't very good at reading. As my professor says, "Make the scenes work harder." Interesting twist with Lily's magicless state. I wonder where that's headed and how it'll play into the story, and how Harry will react to that. I hope soon we'll get some kind of progress with the relationship between Harry and Severus, something small that'll hint they're headed in the right direction. Perhaps Harry needs help with his homework and asks Lily but Lily can't remember the theory behind some magic thing, so she asks Severus to help Harry while she's still sitting there so Severus has to behave. Oh, and is this the place I should state it's not totally my fault? ;) Author's Response: It is your fault, Ella. Deny it all you want. The fault is yours. ;-) Thank you so much for all your writing tips. I really do appreciate them. Hopefully my writing will improve and the story will too. Thanks again! -Vic P.S. It's still your fault.
Author's Response: Oooh, thanks a bunch! I'm so happy you're enjoying it!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Whitetail! I'm glad to hear that you like the characters. That means a great deal!
Author's Response: I'm so glad to hear that! Thanks much for the comment!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Yours happily, Melfis. Author's Response: SnapesYukuai, your reviews always make me so happy. I'm very glad you enjoyed this chapter and I hope you enjoy the latest one too. Thanks for all your lovely comments.
Lily is cute when she is barely awake. Oh, and I love the fact that you gave her such a simply normal habit as snoring. It makes her human and not the perfect person some do portray her as. Great chap, can't wait for more, your Melfis. Author's Response: SnapesYukuai, thank you for all your reviews. I love them. <3 I'm glad you like Lily and I hope she can continue to live up to that. :-) Again, thanks for all the support!
Author's Response: Ah, yes, a reader ahead of the story! Awesome! Everything you brought up will be addressed; some in the very next chapter. It's cool to see somebody paying so much attention to those little details. ;-) Thank you so much for your comments! :D
Author's Response: Yes, Snape demonstrated pretty clearly in canon that as smart as he is, he can definitely be childish at times. Thanks for the comments! They make me smile. :-) |
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