can someone explain what the ratingg mean
| Title: Chapter 1
| 27 Dec 2016 4:35 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Good premise and a well written opening chapter; I like the little details of Albus and Severus' relationship you've woven in and their dialogue. However (and you did ask your readers to be critical ;) I don't think Severus would react so physically or verbally; as a spy Severus would have to be able to exert total control over himself at all times and, given how awkward Snape can be, I can't see him letting his guard down over this with Dumbledore, especially when a. the man already had him bristling and b. Severus must already have had a good idea he would see Lily. Nevertheless, interesting and entertaining chapter.
Great start. Though I do have to wonder how Albus knew Severus had seen Harry.
Very interesting twist. Is Harry Snape and Lily's son then, or just what Snape would wish that he is?
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