| Title: Chapter 2
| 27 Dec 2016 4:41 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you a very amusing chapter.
Nice chapter; I like how you built up Harry's frustration before having the tantrum. However, I think that Harry would be unlikely to insult Snape so vigorously to his face; in his first years, Harry at least tried to be respectful and, after growing up with the Durselys, I expect he learnt how to keep his temper. Personally, I'd have had Harry running into Snape and Ron (who comes from a loving home and has a bad temper) mouthing off. Alternately, you could have a few more things going wrong in Harry's day and restrain Harry's anger to his first *or* second address to Snape.
Nevertheless, I liked the interaction in Snape's study, which felt very believable, as did the conversation between Harry, Ron and Hermione.
Harry is flirting with danger by speaking to Snape that way, isn't he?
Good chappie, onto next.
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