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Reviews For The Son Becomes the Father
But I'm intrigued. The plot is unfolding!
I think maybe I'd like to see a scene where Severus finds out that Toby is his son and gets really mad at Harry and tells him to just stay away from Toby so he doesn't screw him up (or something), and he doesn't realize at that point that Harry is also his son, and Harry feels very upset to lose Toby and also to not have anyone... maybe Harry would feel jealous of Toby to suddenly have an adult that he does not.
The way you have people finding out is very realistic... this is often the way it happens when someone has big secrets to keep. I'm surprised Harry isn't more anxious about people finding out. I would think there would come a point when he would realize, "Oh no... too many people know and there's a chance any of them could tell someone else..." Awesome story! I can't wait to see some Harry/Sev or Sev/Toby parental action! Author's Response: Thank-you, I'm always happy to hear that. Harry will be soon, since he's so focused on just having a plan and things working the way they should that he hasn't taken a moment for himself to just think about it all. That and he has his incredible sense of trust in people, so he doesn't really think anyone would tell. Unless they're an adult, because he has little reliance on them. Thanks! Thanks for your review, I will be updating sometime later tonight.
Thanks for the update! V.
Post more soon, please!
Author's Response: Thanks, I will be updating over the next few days. Harry IS Snape and Lily's son in this, he just doesn't know it yet. Toby is not Snape, he is his own being and while your idea is interesting and would make a very intriguing fanfiction, it is not what is going on here. Toby is Harry's brother and snape's son, that is how I have planned everything. Not a bad idea, just not a good one for this fic. Thanks though.
Just when you think wow, there is know way the story can get better than it all ready is... it does! It is very well done and in character and it had many interesting moments. One thing I did not like was that when Harry made swear on Marauders honour, that was it. You gave know hint as to why Harry was so frantic over Toby, Harry didn't explain it at all. I mean, we all know Remus is smart but would he figure out that the young boy Harry was franticly looking for was secretly staying in the castle and almost no-one knows... just by Harry being extremely protective?? Anyway past the bad stuff and onto the good. The mystery of Mildred Merrengold is a mystery that is sure to infuriate many readers (including me). I hope we find out more information in the future. The Snape-family-thing moment was great and this time I have two favourite lines: 'Harry saw the warning signs of Legitimacy in the man's dark eyes ' i know that is not the whole sentence, but still... Harry knows what to look for, eh? My other favourite line is probably: 'So? You answer to “Snivellus”, or so I heard.' hahaha. Absolutely loved it! Just Classic. But ouch, that one was sure to hurt. Very well done though. So Neville knows now and Remus too. Who will be next to find out? I would like to see how Remus becomes a part of this story. I hope Neville can keep the secret although he is good at doing it when it is very important. I like that Hermione is so evolved with Toby now that Harry and her are friends once more. But Seriously.. Asking him to repeat the tooth story three times?!? That's what i call obsessing! I am hanging for the next chapter it is sure to be better than the last (as always) and I can't wait! I love reviewing your stories and I hope you love my reviews.. From your faithful reviewer BYE!!
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