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Reviews For My Secret Father
Title: Two Sons, Not One 15 May 2022 12:47 am
Reviewer: cavehack (Signed) [Report This]
    Terrific chapter. I loved this line, in particular, “The Snape brothers would go down in infamy.” I’m glad that the boys are behaving as brothers now, and that Severus is trying to understand Harry. I really liked the scene in the Snape quarters.
Title: Two Sons, Not One 30 Sep 2017 10:48 am
Reviewer: Lucinda Hindle (Signed) [Report This]
    Ooooh, if this story wasn't complete I would have had so many ideas, but it looks like you already used them. I was expecting a 'Harry-flinches-from-Snape' moment.
Title: Two Sons, Not One 11 May 2012 7:57 pm
Reviewer: little-sun (Signed) [Report This]
    The prank was really funny. I had to reread this :)
Title: Two Sons, Not One 10 May 2012 11:01 pm
Reviewer: little-sun (Signed) [Report This]
    Sad
Title: Two Sons, Not One 26 Jun 2011 3:11 pm
Reviewer: Flyingchrissy (Signed) [Report This]
    Cool story!! About time snape pulled his head out of his ass. Look forward to the next update.
Title: Two Sons, Not One 05 Jun 2011 1:14 am
Reviewer: Jaylen (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I am enjoying reading your story but one thing is bothering me.You write, "He's an occlumens, so I reckon that's how he knew what to say." This is not correct. Occlumency is the act of magically closing one's mind against Legilimency. It can prevent a Legilimens(the one reading the mind) from accessing one's thoughts and feelings, or influencing them. A person who practises this art(Occlumency) is known as an Occlumens. Severus can do both in the Harry Potter books, but in this instance he is trying to read someone else's mind, so he is using Legilimency. If Harry can also read minds, he is a Legilimens.
Title: Two Sons, Not One 31 May 2011 11:53 pm
Reviewer: Chica (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Heh, Snape's being such an ***hole, I love it. Is he ever going to see the error of his ways? Poor Harry, imagine being dragged away from the teacher who's supposed to punish you, to go off to the private quarters of a man who's spent the last five years making it clear how he felt about you! No wonder he freaked out! I think I would've done, and I don't even have the abusive past. And then he just gave up on the punishment and didn't even try to talk to Harry, or suggest that there was something wrong and Harry could talk to *him* LOL, I think Sev needs remedial parenting classes stat. Really love the way you wrote Harry's fear, it seemed so reasonable and realistic and Sev's incompetence is kinda heartbreaking and kinda endearing. Though I'm glad he's just fictional and not *really* anyone's father! Poor kids. :(

    Are we ever going to find out what really happened with Sev and Kenai's mother? I don't mean the thing he said about having to pretend to Voldemort that he was dating her, cos obviously there must be more to it than that. There's so many unanswered questions there, you've got me right on the edge of my seat!

    Oh, and talking of Kenai, are we going to see why he's in Slytherin? Just cos I was noticing in this chapter, you made such a big deal out of showing how uncunning he is, so I was wondering if maybe during his sorting he did the opposite of what Harry did - you know, so he was telling the hat "Not Gryffindor, not Gryffindor" - cos he didn't want to get in trouble with Sev. I could see that, bet it would make a neat parallel.

    And is there gonna be any more Lily? Obviously not alive, but I mean in dreams and flashbacks and things? I really did love the way you wrote her as all no nonsense and not taking Sev's behaviour. LOL, I bet she'd have something to say about the way he's been acting all these years, right?

    Wow, I just have so many questions. See what your story does? Hope you update soon!

    Author's Response:

    I love to hear insight like this because it tells me what the readers want, what readers are thinking, and the issues I still need to address.  See what your comment did to me?  I had no intention of addressing the Lily issue or Kenai's mother issue any more than it had been, but apparently I'm going to have to try now (no promises though, what comes out of my fingers comes out onto the page without me thinking about it terribly much... sometimes very late at night and gets posted before I can even think about adding or readdressing issues or editing, lol).  I'm not really sure how to address the Lily issue because I somehow see this as a flashback, and I really hate flashbacks.  I hate reading them and I never want to write them... I will have to be creative if they speak about her...  maybe it will just be a separate chapter, but I don't know yet.

     

    I'm glad I could be somewhat realistic with it all.  Unfortunately from being a psych major I know there are many many people out there that are parents like this and it sucks for those kids. 

     

    Thanks for your ideas and insight!  I'd love to hear from you (and all my reviewers) more!

Title: Two Sons, Not One 31 May 2011 2:45 pm
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    Just a thought but I think it would be good to have a flashback on how Severus has treated Harry in class or in detention before so we can understand why harry is resisting him now. Also I'm not sure if you are intending to be close to canon for Y5 but what if Voldermort begins to plague Harry with dreams and Dumbledore asks Severus to teach him occlumenc as no one knows he is one already. Thanks for a great story

    Author's Response:

    I'm not sure about the flashback... I don't like reading flashbacks and I'm not sure about writing one either, but perhaps I will try to address the Severus Harry in class issue more, although I thought I had already given examples?  I value your feedback anyway and I will think about the dreams although I have other plans in mind for Harry and Voldemort very soon.  I really want Severus not to discover about Harry through occlumency at this point because I have other plans for Harry and Severus as well (see, I've already got the end of the story written up).

     

    Thank you very much for your ideas though and I value your opinion.  Thanks for reviewing!

Title: Two Sons, Not One 26 May 2011 11:22 am
Reviewer: heartstar (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Oh so sad I hope that sev can help harry.
Title: Two Sons, Not One 25 May 2011 8:59 pm
Reviewer: SpicyKittins (Signed) [Report This]
    I absolutly love this story!!! I have reread it now for the 3rd or 4th time :D I can't wait to see what happens next!
    An idea, that I'm sure someone has mentioned already, I had was maybe despite the fact that Snape says he'll never know what the journal says He somehow finds out...Harry gives permission, he's too curious, Harry gives it to Snape to read to prove a point, or maybe Kenai reads it and approaches his father? There are other ideas that I can't remember right now. :D

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