Wow, I feel stunned. Never would I have imagined that happening in this story! Kudos for the seriously unexpected plot twist. Can Harry use the necklace to escape into the elven realm?
| Title: In The Ranks
| 17 Jul 2013 10:03 am
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| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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you made him a death eater!!!!
Author's Response: Yeah, keep reading!
| Title: In The Ranks
| 30 Apr 2013 8:50 pm
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| Reviewer: Daisy (Anonymous)
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The Dark Mark is placed on the left arm, not the right. You should fix that, because it takes away from the believability of the story. It's just so basic a detail.
wow, now this was a very very interesting turn, most interesting indeed
Wrong arm, but other than that, interesting developments all around.
| Title: In The Ranks
| 04 Jun 2011 7:05 pm
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| Reviewer: Twilight1987 (Anonymous)
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Aw... I so want Harry to live happily with Severus.... This chapter threw me for a loop. It was a good one though!
I think Severus will be pissed, but I also think that Harry has the ability to remove the mark after all he has a piece of Voldemort in his body.. tap into that and he could replace Voldy.
| Title: In The Ranks
| 04 Jun 2011 9:09 am
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| Reviewer: heartstar (Anonymous)
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Wow just wow tell me that this willnot bite harry in the ass! HAH!
| Title: In The Ranks
| 04 Jun 2011 9:06 am
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| Reviewer: ME (Anonymous)
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hello there! I've just read your complete story. I was hestitating about it, since it seemed kind of...harsh, and I found it I really enjoyed it despite of the fact I had to suppress tears throughout it.
Suggestions? Let Severus read Harry's journal.
When I started reading this, all I wanted to see was Harry punching Severus' face. He deserves it. What kind of father just abandones their child like that? And not only that, but just makes their life a living hell? Or what kind of father chooses a son over another? It's making both his sons' lives a living hell.
I can just see something like that playing out in my head. Maybe Severus pulling 'rank' on Harry, telling him he is his father or something like that. Maybe it could be after Severus finds out about the mark, and Harry saying he has never been one to him, maybe throwing the journal in his face and storming away. Harry has always had quite the temper.
I just wish Severus and Kenai to suffer what Harry has had to go through, specially Severus. I kind of hate your Severus, but at the same time I just want to see him take Harry in his arms.
Well, this would be one of my suggestions.
Keep up with the story and with the rest of them.
from Me, your new reader. :)
Author's Response: Always happy to have a new reader! Thanks for the review.
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