This was a heart wrenching chapter. I’m glad that Severus is feeling some of the pain that he’s caused Harry all these years, even as it feels heartless to say so. I like the way you’ve captured Kenai’s anxiety and fears. I haven’t mentioned it yet, but the journal has been a great way to give us more insight into Harry’s inner world. I hope the fractured family can repair itself soon.
Lovely chapter! I especially appreciated all the small ways in which Snape was forced to acknowledge Harry as his son (from the conversation with Dumbledore, to the room scene, and finally the chapter end). The pacing of their relationship feels slow but natural.
I love the idea of a mental connection between father and son, and I love how you’re using that connection. The back story is super helpful, and I’m looking forward to learning more in the chapters ahead.
This was a heart wrenching chapter. I can feel Harry’s utter despair, in the cold, embattled and alone.
I really like how you’ve portrayed Draco. He’s still sneaky, but in a helpful way now!
This is unbelievable torment. I hope Severus wakes up and realizes what he has before he loses it completely. The quidditch scene was amazing - I couldn’t stop beaming - just perfect!
Oh Harry, ever the hero. Sticking up for Kenai, who treats him abominably. I like your inclusion of Umbridge. She fits right in with the dour mood of the story so far.
Objective achieved - I feel sad and angry for Harry. What an awful situation. Hopefully, it can only improve from here. I like the banner,
Oh, two Snape's together with Weasley products. This is going to be awesome. The chaos. The anarchy. Hogwarts won't know what hit her. Snape and Umbridge won't know what hit them.
Snape finds Harry talking literal nonsense, not even phased.
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