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Title: Survival 04 Apr 2011 4:29 am
Reviewer: Evil Genus (Signed) [Report This]
    Okay, I like, but I honestly think Harry should really make Severus suffer. I mean he is blaming Harry for Lily getting even? Yes I can understand a need for family, but what Severus has done, he should suffer. I mean based on last review i did and your response, he totally needs to get his ass kicked cause this was actaully all his fault at first... and I think Kenai needs an ass kickign as well. I mean most in his situation in the qizarding world would have gone dark. Kinda suprised Voldie hasn't tried to convince him to go dark for vengeance...

    Author's Response: Oh just wait until chapter 10 or 11, you will love the whole Voldemort thing.
Title: Survival 04 Apr 2011 4:25 am
Reviewer: Sirena (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, some a break down here. It seems they can form a family after all, the three of them.
    Like you said Sev s just a human so he make mistakes, but still I'm kinda supriced that he left his child after Lily death... that he wouldn't take his son back. Yeah, I understand he transfer grudge he had for Harry's mother and James for child... ppl are stupid sometimes, well more then sometimes, and that is good example. It based on our way of world seeing and we can't even control it much, can we?
    Ah, hope it all will change and improve!
    I like way you do progresses with relatonship and emotons in story!

    Author's Response: Thanks
Title: Survival 04 Apr 2011 4:19 am
Reviewer: Drayconette (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Well I'm certainly enjoying it. But I do hope and presume that, as much as Harry still wants a family, he surely won't leap at the first sign of return affection. Because, by now, he's been betrayed, put down, hurt, and reject too many times to accept change without a LOT of work from Severus
Title: Survival 04 Apr 2011 3:22 am
Reviewer: Caesara (Signed) [Report This]
    OMG! Amazing!
    What will happen? Will Sev have to save his life from the berries?
    Will Harry say something in his fevered state? I can't wit to read more!
    I really liked how we saw more into snape's thoughts and perspectives! Maybe. just maybe I can see a glimpse of hope?
Title: A Man In Need 03 Apr 2011 11:36 pm
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    Thanks for the information! I love this and don't want to see it all become love and light just yet. I think that Severus will turn on Harry when found for not going to the detention and will give him a double with himself! That would be IC
Title: A Man In Need 03 Apr 2011 8:13 pm
Reviewer: Peaches (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Wait, so Snape has had the mental connection to Harry all the time he's been with his relatives and he's never considered going to check on him to see why he gets the feelings of pain and unease? I'm sorry, but that just seems monstrous.

    It's one thing to be an absentee father, but in this story Snape has shown himself to be a neglectful and even abusive one. The lack of acknowledgment, the constant verbal denigration, the fact that his own son is unable to consider even admitting that he might have helped his brother, not even having the instinctive reaction to *help* when Harry is hurt - it's really too much to bear. And there doesn't seem to be any excuse for it other than selfish self pity. Obviously it's difficult for all fathers (and mothers) who lose their children, but most of them would jump at the chance to reestablish their relationship, rather than act like their child isn't a human being.

    I'm sorry, it's probably not your intention, but when I'm reading this I find myself desperately hoping that Harry's going to be adopted by someone else and get a *real* father and family - one who actually loves him and isn't verbally and emotionally abusive like the Snapes. Certainly no reasonable court or social worker would give Snape custody of Harry in the real world. I hope it's going to be the same in this story. I'm glad that at least he doesn't seem to want it. Yes, I agree that Severus is human and can and will make errors like any one else. But people have to take responsibility for those errors and sometimes there are consequences that can't be fixed or overlooked. I can't see how it would be healthy for Harry to have any kind of familial relationship with Snape.

    Please believe me when I say that your writing is good. Particularly I think you have a great ear for dialogue; I could hear your characters speaking perfectly. But I don't think I'll be reading anymore of this story; I don't think I could bear it if it was heading for the typical 'Snape and Harry form a family together' ending.

    Author's Response: Keep reading, I don't think you'll be disappointed.  Yes, Snape is monstrous, but there is more to it than what you've seen so far, and Harry and the Snape's aren't just going to be jumping into a relationship quickly without thinking over things.  I'm not entirely sure yet at this point if they will be in a relationship at all or not.  What I do know is that things need to be fixed first before anyone can considder them getting into a familial relationship, and that takes time.  All things are fixable however, and that is something I truly do believe.
Title: A Man In Need 03 Apr 2011 6:48 pm
Reviewer: slytherensangel26 (Signed) [Report This]
    this is very interesting. update soon!
Title: A Man In Need 03 Apr 2011 10:07 am
Reviewer: Eowynn (Signed) [Report This]
    WOW!! I hope they find him, and I hope to start to see some if the healing.however I don't want ut to be too easy in severus, he had been hurting a child that did him no harm. Also, why did Lily leave? Did he cheat on her, considering how close the two brothers are in age. Did she cheat on him? Did James steal her away? Why didn't Severus take Harry after they died? Sorry I obviously have alot of questions roaming around in my head.

    Author's Response: I promise that all of your questions will be answered in the coming chapters.  Thanks for the review.
Title: P.S. I Hate You 03 Apr 2011 8:48 am
Reviewer: Deco (Anonymous) [Report This]
    The story reminds me of the ones in which the Dursleys behave like demented psychopaths for no particular reason and are never caught at it. There's no good reason for Snape's behaviour, and Harry's behaviour makes no earthly sense either. Everybody behaves in a way that makes for angsty scenes but has no internal consistency. This is known as melodrama. Melodrama may be fun to write, but it's a chore to read.

    And I hate the name "Kenai". It sounds anime.

    Author's Response: Snape's behavior is explained later, and if you were a teenager being treated like Harry has been, you might see the reasoning behind how he feels.  Kenai is a word from Alaska, not any kind of Asian culture (that I know of).  Seems like a pure flame review to me.  Nothing remotely constructive about how to improve in anything you said.  I don't mind if people don't like what I've written, so long as they actually have something constructive to say.  If you feel like its a chore to read, simply move along to the next story, or maybe even a genre full of fluff or empty plot with flat characters.
Title: A Man In Need 03 Apr 2011 6:36 am
Reviewer: Svarra (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Hmm, so Snape cheated on Lily possibly? Then he really has no one to blame for her leaving but himself, unless there are extenuating circumstances that we don't know about.

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