WOOT!!! A New Chappie!!! Update again SOON!!!!
I loved this chapter! I'm really glad you went more canon with Harry's mistreatment, as many authors really go to town with the abuse, which I'm not huge on. One thing I noticed though was that your dialogue was formatted incorrectly. Instead of 'Meow.' He said. it should be 'Meow,' he said. There should be a comma and the he shouldn't be capitalized. I know it took me ages to learn most of the rules for dialogue (I'm still learning too) so I would suggest that you read an article or two on the internet to clarify some things, as it helped me to do so. Anyways, I really liked the chapter and am looking forward to the next one sooo much! It made me laugh when Snape meowed. ;)
LOVE this story! I'm sooo glad you updated!!
That was really good! (had me sniffling) I agree about cannon--but I can imagine the Dursleys pushing and shaking him somewhat. They might skate that thin like of abuse as many people do. They're able to mentally excuse it because it's not hitting. Still, starving and demeaning someone is pretty bad all by itself. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
AWWWW! Adorable! Pleast continue! OH by the way at the end of this chapter, "madder" should be "angrier". It is in the area where Harry states that Snape should not have bitten Uncle Vernon.
Very Nice. I like the growth of understhanding that is taking place.
Looking forward to your next update. V.
Title: The Journey Begins
| 26 Apr 2011 3:50 pm
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Reviewer: Kristi (Anonymous)
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This chapter was great! Severus realizes that he was wrong about how Harry was treated. I can't wait to see more interactions between Harry and "Seven". I wonder what Harry will think when he finds out his furry companion was his feared and hated Potions professor. Please update again soon!
Title: Observations
| 26 Apr 2011 3:47 pm
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Reviewer: Victoire (not logged in) (Anonymous)
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Wow, I TOTALLY love this story! It's really nice and not too extreme with abuse thing. I will surely seek out the continuation.
Keep up the good work!
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