You handled that well. I'm looking forward to more :)
Author's Response: I'm pleased you thought so! ;) Thanks for the review.
Great job! I feel so bad for Severus!
Author's Response: Yeah, he does get a bit of a raw deal in life, doesn't he? Poor bugger, with Harry having to witness it too! Thanks for the review JAWorley!
Awesome chapter! Wow, great job with Snape and having him take that potion. You wrote him well. There could be more descriptions, I feel like I'm reading osmething and not like I'm watching something, or that I'm actually there. But that is a style critique. I do enjoy your style.
Amazing story and great development. Good job with Harry's thoughts and everyone is in character. I really enjoy reading your story and can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review Jan! I know there probably isn't as much description as there could be but: a) I didn't want to overdo it. And b) my problem is that I am so imaginative that in anything I write or read I don't really need much for description because I'm so visual. Anyway, thank you so much for the review and constructive criticism! I will totally try to incorporate more desciption, and have been trying to do so, though I tend to forget sometimes! ;) Well, cheers!
| Title: Waking Dreams
| 27 May 2011 2:49 am
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| Reviewer: Kristi (Anonymous)
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Poor Severus. It seems like he is reliving the worst moments of his life. Although, the first hallucination, the flying blue deer with butterfly wings, is pretty funny. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: I thought I'd throw something funny in there too, and thank you for reviewing.
Weird, yeah, but it had to be weird. I liked it a lot!
Author's Response: Glad you liked it. And I sort of thought it had to be a sort of uncomfortable scene anyways, in order for Harry to see some things, and for the reader to get a true glimpse into Snape really.
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