Great chapter! I loved the interaction between Snape and Dumbledore, and some of the little details along the way were lovely. Not to be bothersome, but I did notice your dialogue is still not quite formatted correctly. Sometimes you use a comma needlessly when the sentence after is not a dialogue tag. For example: "But you think yourself pretty damned clever," He needed another cup of tea, or maybe five. The sentence after is not a dialogue tag, so therefore it would be a period. Oh yes, and you were also still capitalizing the first letter of the dialogue tag after the dialogue. For example: "Blah," He said. Whereas it would be "Blah," he said. This goes for dialogue ending in question marks, exclamation marks etc. Weird, right? Anyway, perhaps read about that somewhere, as I know I am probably not very clear in my explanations. I absolutely loved the chapter, and I cannot wait for the next one! Your ideas are fun, and I look forward to see what else you will come up with. And sorry if I was a bother with the nit picky things, but it really helps in the long run, trust me! Please update soon! :)
Author's Response: Thank you for all your comments, they have been really lovely and I appreciate it. About the dialogue, I take creative license with it. The wonderful thing (and a rather terrible things at the same time) about the English language is the fluidity of the rules. I know that the formatting which you have advocated is the most commonly accepted, but it has never been proven to me that anything, punctuation or grammar, in the English language is finite. As a Creative Writing Major in college, I have taken many writing classes in which professors will either agree or disagree with my formatting. If I were to professionally publish, I would be more open if my editor wanted this changed. But as for writing fanfiction online…well, I’ll write what I find most ascetically pleasing (and it really is a visual thing to me).
Again, I just wanted to thank you for reading this story and leaving such nice comments. I hope you continue to read and enjoy!