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Reviews For A First Time for Everything
Loved the whole chapter! I did notice that you've been calling the Gryffindor portrait the Pink Lady, but it should be the Fat Lady. Though I kinda like the first one better, it's also a good drink. There were a few typos, but I can't remember them now. Here were some things I particularly liked in this chapter. The beginning, when Harry is worried that Wood will kick him off the team. He thinks, Would Wood get rid of me? That line cracked me up, because it reminded me of the whole "how much wood could a woodchuck chuck if a woodchuck could chuck wood?" One of my brother-in-law's favorite sayings. When Snape asks Harry to breakfast, that was sweet, and also when Draco says a romance between Ron and Hermione is revolting. I agree with him! Meeting Lucius--Sev's inner comments were hilarious, especially when he thought about cutting off Lucius' family jewels and making him eat them . . . with some fava beans and a nice chianti, right? LOL! I also liked when they visited Lily and she finally explained to Severus why she did what she did and he forgave her. Hope she gets well soon!
The match was written a little awkwardly but I know how it is hard write some good comments ;) I would kick Malfoy in his family jewels too... And the scene in hospital was really cute =o) But I'm curious how will Harry explain the new things to Ron and Hermione. I can see how will Ron throw one big fit of jealousy and Hermione will try to explain to Harry that Severus want him dead. I wouldn't want to be in Harry's place... =o)
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