this was very good...and i must say that this world you've creaeted is pretty small isn't it. lolz
I love you. There are so many twists in this that I never would have expected- and it's all written beautifully to boot!
Great chapter! While Harry shouldn't be afraid to ask if he can stay with his father, Sev needs to realize that if he doesn't start initiating things like that--before Draco is involved--Harry is going to start feeling like an afterthought, a tag along, and not a real part of anything (other than his mom). As for Tobias, interesting twist--looking forward to "what's next"!
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| Title: Family Matters
| 15 Jun 2011 9:59 pm
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| Reviewer: S.S (Anonymous)
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I really love the way the story is unfolding and I would love to read more
In the beginning you said that Christmas break was only a week away, but it was December 1st. Don't you mean 2 weeks away? Because they still have finals to take, it would be way too early to end the term in the second week of December. Third week makes more sense.
I liked the talk between Harry and Draco, it was nice and the snowball fight.
The conversation between Severus and Dumbledore had me confused though. I did think it was rather unfair of him to spring Tobias on him like that. He should have asked Severus how he felt about the man, because it's rather awkward to just hire a man that you know has a past history of bad blood with one of your employees and just expect them to get along with each other. He's really not considering Severus' feeling at all. But then again, he never did when he was a student either. I had to laugh when he said he really didn't favor James, what bull!
But the part I was confused about was his relationship to Eileen. I thought you told me he was going to be a bachelor and only related to Severus as an uncle, and Abe was going to be the grandfather. Why did you change it?
I liked his talk with Lily, but she also needs to remember that forgiveness is something that comes when the person is ready to forgive, it can't be forced, the way Dumbledore is trying to do. Pressuring Severus into forgiving Tobias isn't going to work. He has to be ready and right now he doesn't trust the man, which is understandable.
| Title: Family Matters
| 14 Jun 2011 12:06 pm
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| Reviewer: Cad (Anonymous)
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Wow, I love your story!! And I can't wait to see the bond between Harry and Severus growing stronger!! And I hope there will be some conflicts between the father and the son and the two cousins!
Well, sorry for my mistakes, I'm french! All I want to say is good job and good luck for the next chapter! :)
| Title: Family Matters
| 14 Jun 2011 9:35 am
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| Reviewer: Amelie (Anonymous)
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Hello !
I am french and my english is very bad.
But I have to say that I really LOVE you story. It´s amazing ! I love the way you describe snape and harry's relationship !
Anyway... congratulations !I love this chapter too! I hope severus invite Harry in his quarters for christmas ! :)
Ps: Maybe you story would help my english ^^
So glad you are back writing an HP story. Love how Draco and Harry are getting along. Really miss your 3 lions and a pair of snakes story! I love reading your work.
| Title: Family Matters
| 14 Jun 2011 6:52 am
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| Reviewer: Twilight1987 (Anonymous)
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Awesome! That was a major surprise... I definitely didn't see it coming! I feel bad for Sev though.... And for Harry. And a bit for Draco... Ah! Sorry I'm a bit of a sortie when it comes to them! Keep up the amazing work!
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