Great idea including Neville instead of immobilizing him. Draco was also a good addition. I liked how both Lily and Severus rescued Harry and defeated Voldemort (at least temporarily).
| Title: A Perfect Day
| 06 Jul 2011 11:14 pm
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| Reviewer: Elena (Signed)
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Wow this stroy is amazing! I came across it the day before yesterday for it was the "story of the moment" and i've read it whole!!!!! By the way i love the way they are all related to each other, i had to write down the family tree!!!!!
Please don't give up writing it!
Are you planning to write Year Two?
Bye
Elena
This is my second time trying to review, the first time the stupid review box timed out and lost it.
I really liked how everyone helped retrieve the stone and all. Hermione kissing Harry was cute. I had her do that in my fic Arms of A Dark Angel. I like putting them together, they have a good rapport.
I also loved the scene between Severus and Lily. So sweet and Sev is so funny with his insecurities. But I like that much better than being a braggart in a man. There's no greater turn off for a woman than to have a guy boast that he's all that and God's gift, know what I mean?
I liked how Severus scolded and yelled at all of the kids afterwards. Will he give Draco a few smacks too like he did Harry?
Great last scene! When they get married, all the kids could be at the wedding, if they do it at school.
FYI--I've updated Lily's Defender on ff.net
| Title: A Perfect Day
| 05 Jul 2011 6:29 pm
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| Reviewer: Kristi (Anonymous)
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Great chapter! There were a few errors (misspelled words, capitalization, and Severus saying "due" instead of "do"). Loved the moments between Severus and Lily. I hope that you are foreshadowing something more for Harry and Hermione. I loved that you had both Draco and Neville join the Trio. I can't wait to see what happens next!
Another great chapter! I particularly like the softening of Severus, but I'm not so sure Ron would have taken the whole thing so calmly!
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| Title: A Perfect Day
| 05 Jul 2011 7:57 am
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| Reviewer: LGW (Anonymous)
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Wow Jamie. Just, simple Wow.
Guess what, I loved it.
Will try to email you soon! You know how RL can be a pain in your a...where Hagrid will shove his boot in Severus.
Ok, ttyl!!!!
Gaby :D
I think possibly the best chapter yet, will you write about the summer or end this part of the series soon?
great work
Yea!! I got Lily and Snape interaction and Harry and 'Mione!! That was awesome! Keep both those coming! How will all of this play out? Looking forward to reading more.
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