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Reviews For A First Time for Everything
But it will take time to get over the past. Why was it that Albus never acknowledged Eileen as his daughter? And why would he allow his own grandson to be bullied by the Marauders, even if one of them was his other grandson? I don't quite get why he wouldn't make an attempt to stop the Marauders from doing what they did, or why he didn't persuade Severus that he had something left to live for besides the dark path?
Update soon, please! =o)
V.
I liked the talk between Harry and Draco, it was nice and the snowball fight. The conversation between Severus and Dumbledore had me confused though. I did think it was rather unfair of him to spring Tobias on him like that. He should have asked Severus how he felt about the man, because it's rather awkward to just hire a man that you know has a past history of bad blood with one of your employees and just expect them to get along with each other. He's really not considering Severus' feeling at all. But then again, he never did when he was a student either. I had to laugh when he said he really didn't favor James, what bull! But the part I was confused about was his relationship to Eileen. I thought you told me he was going to be a bachelor and only related to Severus as an uncle, and Abe was going to be the grandfather. Why did you change it? I liked his talk with Lily, but she also needs to remember that forgiveness is something that comes when the person is ready to forgive, it can't be forced, the way Dumbledore is trying to do. Pressuring Severus into forgiving Tobias isn't going to work. He has to be ready and right now he doesn't trust the man, which is understandable.
Loved the whole chapter! I did notice that you've been calling the Gryffindor portrait the Pink Lady, but it should be the Fat Lady. Though I kinda like the first one better, it's also a good drink. There were a few typos, but I can't remember them now. Here were some things I particularly liked in this chapter. The beginning, when Harry is worried that Wood will kick him off the team. He thinks, Would Wood get rid of me? That line cracked me up, because it reminded me of the whole "how much wood could a woodchuck chuck if a woodchuck could chuck wood?" One of my brother-in-law's favorite sayings. When Snape asks Harry to breakfast, that was sweet, and also when Draco says a romance between Ron and Hermione is revolting. I agree with him! Meeting Lucius--Sev's inner comments were hilarious, especially when he thought about cutting off Lucius' family jewels and making him eat them . . . with some fava beans and a nice chianti, right? LOL! I also liked when they visited Lily and she finally explained to Severus why she did what she did and he forgave her. Hope she gets well soon! |
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