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Reviews For The Veil
I'm curious what happened to Sev and Harry... Author's Response: Thank you The next chapter will enlighten you.
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Another problem in the story thus far is that you summarize a great deal. In the first couple of chapters, I thought perhaps you were summarizing the action because this was more-or-less a prologue and you'd be getting the the main story later. However, at 4 chapters in, you are still summarizing a lot of the action for us, rather than letting the reader see it unfold on the page. It would help if you used less passive voice. This story is difficult to rate, because the plot is great and the the writing, on a sentence by sentence basis, is good, yet the pacing is pedantic and occasionally the action is slightly off and confusing. Author's Response: Thank you Have taken your comments on board.
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