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Title: Pantene for Men 14 Feb 2012 10:21 pm
Reviewer: Chaser (Signed) [Report This]
    This is a great story. You're writing is crisp and flows at a natural pace. I like that you are pacing the story slowly. Too many fanfic writers just jump headfirst into the pool of fluff, and the end is not really earned.

    Jenkins is a creeper. It is eerie how you write him -- supposedly kind and warm, but with a darker side clearly lurking underneath. I suppose that's how it goes, isn't it? Also, I'm curious as to the choice of the name. Was it random or does it mean something? My first thought was that it sounds like Jekyll, which is quite appropriate.

    Also, I don't think Harry is OOC, at least, not relative to most fanfics. He feels like a twelve-year-old boy, which is hard to do. Most writers seem to make him too young.

    I hope you keep going with this story, it's great!

    Author's Response:

    While I actually now love the comparison to Jekyll, I'm afraid I wasn't quite that creative in picking a name.  To be honest, I just wracked my brain for a nice, common English name that wasn't Smith and had never (as far as I'm aware) shown up in Harry Potter before; and thank you so much for the compliments, both on the pacing and the characterizations!  Trying to write a twelve year old is extremely difficult because it's that awful, awkward age between being a child and a real teenager.  I'm glad you think I've got it right. 

Title: Pantene for Men 14 Feb 2012 9:00 pm
Reviewer: sinfine (Signed) [Report This]
    Thanks for this chapter, it's really nice piece of story. I don't trust Jenkins a bit, for me his behavior is too creepy (and I've read Warnings :P). Please speed up action a bit, I think it's a little too slow. Can't wait for more!
Title: Pantene for Men 14 Feb 2012 4:30 am
Reviewer: Lady Destiny (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh my goodness, I'm right aren't I? Jenkins is going to get too friendly with Harry, isn't he??
    Goodness, Snape needs to get his head outta his arse and save Harry!!

    Author's Response: Reading this comment right after the one you put before it really made my day, how you wanted to deny and then caught on.  Hopefully this sudden realization won't ruin the story for you.  I really appreciate all the feedback you've given me. 
Title: Pantene for Men 14 Feb 2012 4:19 am
Reviewer: Lady Destiny (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh God I just had a worse thought...Jenkins not a pedophile is he?? I'm sure I'm completely jumping to conclusions here lol but I just wanted to have some reassurance here :D
    Update soon please, I'm really interested in where this is going.
Title: More Than One Way to Skin a Cat 14 Feb 2012 4:13 am
Reviewer: Lady Destiny (Signed) [Report This]
    I really like this Jenkins guy...I only hope he's not a spy or something that turns evil and breaks Harry's trust
Title: Gags and Giggles 14 Feb 2012 4:09 am
Reviewer: Lady Destiny (Signed) [Report This]
    Awww, well done!
Title: Snips and Snails and Puppy Dogs' Tails 14 Feb 2012 4:05 am
Reviewer: Lady Destiny (Signed) [Report This]
    Argh Snape makes me so mad!
Title: Just Harry 14 Feb 2012 4:03 am
Reviewer: Lady Destiny (Signed) [Report This]
    Great start!
Title: Pantene for Men 13 Feb 2012 8:57 pm
Reviewer: timesurfer (Signed) [Report This]
    Am I imagining things, or is Jenkins getting a bit too friendly? This is great; definitely keep writing. I look forward to reading on.

    Oh, by the way, if you need a beta-reader, I'm open.
Title: Pantene for Men 13 Feb 2012 7:39 pm
Reviewer: AmazingGrace36 (Signed) [Report This]
    Fantastic story! The relationship you're building between Jenkins and Harry is wonderfully and horrifyingly realistic. Your characterizations are perfect and I love your writing style. I can't wait to read the rest of this!

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