Title: Affection
| 23 Jul 2011 7:41 pm
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Reviewer: Tsukinoko (Anonymous)
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Hi! I hope Harry can go back to Snape's house! I think you have 2 more small issues. First, I don't believe J.K. Rowling even mentions Harry liking Ginny until book 6 and they certainly don't date until well into the book (the end, basically). Also, the part where Harry asked Slughorn if his parents knew each other doesn't make sense because Slughorn was just talking about Snape and Lily so it sounds like Harry thinks Snape is his father or something. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: It's fan fiction so things change, like Harry and Ginny dating earlier. I'll go back and look at the sceond part though.
Thanks for the review.