I'm happy that finally the parents found the children. I really like your story. Thanks for the new chapter.
Lucius's plan of dressing up as a Death Eater was a good one. While the children are being freed, he and Draco should be able to get the trust of the Death Eaters and find out something about this group of Voldemort wannabe followers. I think Harry should have Remus in front. An angry werewolf should scare the heck out of a bunch of hungover Death Eaters.
| Title: After the Battle
| 25 Mar 2013 12:13 am
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| Reviewer: Kirinin (Anonymous)
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I am not sure you needed this chapter. This could have been an author's notes about how your story is different from canon.
Better yet, you could have just said "my story differs from canon in several ways" and let the reader catch on. It's hard to start a story with a lot of exposition like this and keep the reader entertained.
Author's Response: Just so you know, this is not my work, but the work of the former author of this story. It was his first and then I adopted it around chapter 9 when he gave it to me. I just kept it all the same in the beginning because the story was his to start with and not mine. I had written a few chapters before this, like 5 and 7, but until I adopted it, the story wasn't mine to do with as I pleased. So whether this was a necessary chapter is really a moot point for me. But thanks for reading. Try the other chapters, I'm sure you will like them better.
another fabulous chapter Snapegirl.
I like that there aren't any gruesome torture scene.
What brave little souls. I love that the mini trio had to combine their magic to send out a patronus. Now I wanna see Harry and co deal out some justice to Goyle, but maybe go easier on the other two.
| Title: Potter Picnic
| 24 Mar 2013 5:49 am
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| Reviewer: Madi (Anonymous)
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"But he didn't want to get into a debate about who was the smarter wizard with a four-year-old." THAT MADE MY WHOLE DAY. I LAUGHED SO HARD. IT'S SO CUTE!
I can see why the Death Eaters aren't a major concern at that time. What a bunch of idiots. It nice that Sirius came up with the suggestion of linking their power. Now they just have to hold out until rescuers arrive.
Wow, 2 kidnapping scenarios in 2 fics! I'm game! Give me moar!
Great chapter
Wow. A new chapter of Common Interest yesterday and a new chapter of Unveiled today. You rock, Snapegirl! With Ginny's temper lately she might be just as scary as Harry when the kidnappers are finally captured. I can hardly wait to find out who they are and how the kids manage to get away.
I really like this story. Death Eaters mean lot of trouble. What will happen to the children? I hope you will post new chapter soon.
Dun Dun Dun whole shit thats not cool.
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