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Reviews For Second Chances
Harry does want Severus, Sirius & Remus to know the truth about him....but at the same time its also clear that he doesn't want to lose his second chance at having both a childhood but also a less troubled time at Hogwarts? At times its very easy to fall prey to either hating/or simply being very annoyed at Albus too-many-names Dumbledore who just can't seem to stop himself from meddling in others lives. But Harry does seem pretty determined that Severus won't spy anylonger & nor will he nor any of there friends die or be sacrificed in the war? Author's Response: It does doesnt it...he wants that chance at childhood..and honestly who can blame him? Albus will get better, because I loved him in the first 3 books, at the moment just be a bit annoyed, he will come to see Harry's way with time lol. I cant answer your last question without giving the story away..lol
call Harry 153yrs selfish in his reasons for going back. Despite how much good happened after the defeat of Voldemort, having a family...those deaths in the war never really left Harry. I think his soul remained wounded. But how will Harry handle seeing so many of his old friends both young & some alive again...will he be able to handle the emotional upset?
In the last part were Severus and Sirius went to visit the Dursley's, you had written that Harry had been there for 11 years, but he wasn't. It was only 10 years. Harry got there when he was a year old, so if he was 11 years old, he would have been there for 10 years. It is an easy mistake, I see it a lot. I just wanted to let you know. If you have any questions, you know how to ask me. Author's Response: Thank you for pointing that out...my mistake and I will..if you see any other mistakes..just review and I'll fix them
I like the story so far. Author's Response: Yes I know that...I'm sorry but your gonna have to be more clearer because I dont understand what you wanted..Did you want me to correct something or what? Gladyou like it though..
there still be an accident during the 1st yrs flying lesson involving Neville, or will Harry prevent it only to perhaps be hurt himself? So Harry's made tenantive friends with both Draco and Ron, but just who else will he extend his hand in friendship to? How exactly will Harry (with the aid of allies) be able t reduce to rivalry and tension between all 4 houses but instead to foster friendship betwen the houses as it should be? Perhaps by teaching those muggle-raised & muggleborn about the wizarding world and those things that wizard- born take for granted...wizard studies? Common/study rooms for each years regardless of houses... the introduction of more social clubs or sports activities (as quidditch only involves actively a very small % of the students) the other students need sports, as those improve physical stamina which is good for wizards magical training, yes? Cultural nights with elves introducing food from different cultures, the production of drama/play, talent nights...you know activities which will bring about a more community feel to the school, so that there is an activity or group for every student regardless if there into sports, playing chess or other muggle games, play instruments or dance! I also think that "all" of the staff are very overworked particularly the head of houses they all need deputy heads of house, or the staff at the very least needs an administration officer, perhaps also a peer counsellor (with the necessary guidance/training) to offer further support to students in particular the 1st yr students. The introduction of some of the more useful muggle items such as school work done in notebooks & the use of muggle ink pens instead of quills...little things like that! As you can tel this story has me thinking a lot about how the school actually works...which just shows how great this story is, otherwise I wouldn't been thinking about it so much!! Author's Response: Yes in the new Chapter I put up someone will get hurt but its different the before It wont be Neville, he'll be saved It was someone else he's close to though. I'm not sure who else, I havnt got that far yet lol. Although most of those questions will have to wait for later chapters lest I give something awayYou have some really good ideas though that I will def use if you dont mind.
I'll have to keep alot of what you said in mind, like I said there are some reeally great ideas..
Author's Response: I'm glad you do, thanks for readinf and reviewing
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it, thanks for the review
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