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Reviews For Unforgiveable Sirius
Author's Response: Oh....well I dont remember that part. *shrugs* It's fanfiction though...so it's allowed to hve mistakes, not to mention Canon completely flies out the window the majority of the time. Glad you like it for the most part I guess.
Now seriously, I really liked how you develop the story, not only Severus and Harry's relationship, but also Ron's with Severus, and Sirius, Remus and Albus as well. I am delighted to read how Harry has changed his former insecurity for the unconditional love for his new father, and I melt inside when I read Severus' reactions to Harry, and how he has come to deeply care for him and love him so much. I'm not really into 'Severitus' stories (I'm much a Snarry sort of person, I prefer it when they end up having a romantic story rather than a fraternal one) but this one has absolutely made my day and I will be coming back to read when you write more. Congratulations for this amazing fic!
You managed to make me like him :) Although I know (as much as Severus) that Albus didn't really mean what he said I still can't get over it... and then he just walks into the christmas morning and acts like everything is fine. But well - that's the Albus we know... and after a few more chapters including a remorseful Albus he will be forgiven :D It is good that Severus handled the situation that well - he is the right person to care for Harry. But I see a maaajor angst chapter incoming - a letter from Sirius can't be that good (and if I'm being honest I don't even want him to become good... he messed up too badly for my taste). Please continue as soon as possible, I can't wait for the next chapter :)
Anyway, the way that you depict the relationship between Harry and Snape is very well done. The ending of this chapter was especially sweet.
The main one is the use of "your" and "you're." "Your" indicates ownership. You've used it correctly here: “Open your eyes wolf, of course he doesn’t want to stay here. Can you blame him?” "You're" is a contraction of "you" and "are." Here is an instance where you should have used "you're" instead of "your:" “As well as anyone can be I guess, he’s still scared if that’s what YOUR asking." It should be "you're" as in, "if that's what you're asking."
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