This is a fantastic read!
I love your version of Hermione, and Snape as well
Interesting start to your story!
Please excuse me while I give an excited squeal. ^_^
| Title: Chapter 25
| 03 Feb 2013 10:01 pm
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| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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amazing!! the plot as well as the writing were wonderful. good job.
" The three of them walked into the cold winter night. Harry breathed in the lovely fresh air, looked at the stars and suddenly regretted not knowing most of them." This should really be two sentences, with the verb ending for 'regret' changed in the second, as I have it.
But aside from those two minor changes--what you have CONVEYED in this/these lines is what's special. You have captured Harry's heightened senses due to his (we all assume) impending death. He is treasuring what he and we figure to be his last moments, and therefore they are all the more precious.
That Severus shared his overwhelming guilt over Lily's death saved Harry's mind in this chapter. Inspired--very well done.
Terrific upbeat ending, made all the sweeter by the preceding angsty chapters! I was especially impressed with your interpretation of Snape throughout-- I suspect you managed to capture exactly how the man in black felt INSIDE, regardless of how he presented himself to the world. I hope he can finally seek and find some peace of mind, and yay for Harry and Hermione helping him out the way they did. Thanks for a very entertaining read!
Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, Snape felt very black, no wonder after what DD and Voldemort put him through... and his own choices, etc. I am very happy you enjoyed it, it was fun to write!
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