This is heart-wrenching, but that last bit of the chapter was really sweet.
I like the premise of this story. I do find Severus, Harry and Draco all to be a little out of character though.
I do believe that Severus would care for Harry in a situation like this, but I don't necessarily think he would be so willing to take him in initially, nor do I think he'd know how to act around Harry (or any hurt child).
I also find a Draco Harry friendship to be implausible, especially with Harry being disabled. To be fair though, a lot of people like Draco and I'm not one of those people.
Anyways, not trying to be overly negative. I do enjoy the premise and the attention to the practical details of Harry's injury. Thanks for writing.
Harry really has a lot of physical damage. I wonder if Madam Pomfrey will be able to help with some of it when Harry gets to Hogwarts?
as for writting style the only thing wrong i see is snape's internal decision making and reasoning on why he is doing what he is doing. a little more detail and deeper reasoning from snape would be pretty good.
this chapter was hard to read. I am still crying and mad at the Dursley's
Aww cute!
On to the next chappie now:)
awww Draco i think this is going to help draco as much as it will help harry
This is a really good story...I'm gonna be a blubbering mess before long though..I love your Harry and your Snape..and your Draco..
Aww, Draco and Harry make a good pair of friends
this is a very good start! i'm very interested into where this is going next!
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