| Title: Chapter 10
| 16 Jun 2005 3:21 am
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| Reviewer: Nancy Reynolds (Anonymous)
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Awwww, a Mary Sue, and I was really enjoying the interaction between Snape and Harry :(
| Title: Chapter 5
| 16 Jun 2005 2:46 am
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| Reviewer: Gershwhen (Anonymous)
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WOW, I really feel badly for Harry's friends and family (Sirius). They must feel so awful -- I can't believe that someone as nice as Harry would want to hurt them with this type of lie.
I might suggest that you describe a bit more about the emotions of the characters, rather than just telling us what they do. We need to see what they're feeling, it helps the reader connect to the story.
Wow... That just about nocked me on my ass. It was incredible!!! I swear! So full of emotion, I bloody near CRIED when Severus reacted as he did! It was brilliant, in my oppinion, the mark of a good story is one that can truly lead your emotions along with the characters. Brilliant! This is definatly an inspiring fic. 8grin* Considdering it took me about a week to get to the end! lol! I have to read at the pub lib and there's a time limit. Anyways, excelent fic! Next chap!! ASAP!!!!!!
| Title: Chapter 15
| 02 Feb 2005 1:22 am
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| Reviewer: just_krystal (Anonymous)
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this story is great. i love the new characters and the spirit goddesses. Severus seems a little OOC, but I like the way he turned out. But, you are very evil for leaving that massive cliffie there at ch. 15. Did Remus die, or did Harry save him? oh the possibilities are endless. Please keep writing if not for me and the rest of your devoted readers than for yourself.
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