I think you've captured Harry's grief well, especially with this line: "And although Harry's world had changed, the world itself hadn't." It is a devastating realization when you've lost a loved one, to find that you are expected to rejoin the world in a reasonable amount of time, even though your heart feels like it will never recover. This moment between Harry and Snape is a very sweet one.
Very good use of your prompts, and thanks so much for sharing this excellent story! =)
Wow. Truly, this was breathtaking! You didn't need a single line of dialogue to express this, in fact I think if either had said anything it might have altered it. Without a few hints of non-canon, I could almost think this had actually happened or could have. How you tied everything together and used the prompts was really interesting. I enjoyed how you told this scene, so thank you for sharing. You did an excellent job! :)
Powerfully written...wish there was more interaction though. Although I suppose that was the style of this piece. Still, well done.
Very nice Toria! You used the prompts really well :)
That was nice! I liked your use of adjectives. They really gave your story air.
Harry's thoughts were nicely written too:)
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