I liked how Harry gave Snape owl treats. It conjured a rather funny image. The occasional bits of humour were quite fun. I did however find the style a little jumpy - what with the time changes. I had to read over some things a couple times to get my bearings. It may have worked better if you had started with Snape reminiscing and then had him think back to the day that his opinion changed about Harry. That, or maybe you could have broken the story up by beginning a second chapter when Snape first started to reminisce from some point in the future. From my experience it can be a little bit easier on a reader when a new chapter introduces the new time period. It can be a bit confusing if it happens in the middle of a piece. Anyway, just spitballing here. Ah yes, and so you know, I quite enjoyed the description of Minerva's reaction when she figured out Harry tried to use Snape as a post owl! It was quite amusing!
Author's Response: Yes, I can see your point. There was more differentiation in the fonts on my home computer, which I thought made the timescale clear enough: they look more similar here. I also appear to have messed up some of the spacing. Amateurs! Thanks for taking the time to comment, Whitetail.
Oh, now you got me curious over the last statement - a pair of Snapes...care to enlighten? Mayhap in a sequel - or even filler chapters from when Harry left the Dursley's, to being with Sirius and Severus. Heck I want all the juicy details!
I thoroughly enjoyed this, and want - no NEED more! :)D
Hugs and Love,
Vanime
Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it. I had fun too.
Aww that was cute!
Author's Response: Good!
“I am not a bloody post owl, you foolish boy. But keep scratching JUST there and I may reconsider.”....Teehee.
If only things could have ended this way, there'd be so much less heartache...and a pair of Snapes? Hm. I'd so read more in this 'verse if you ever decided to continue. =) Very cool story! Thanks for sharing it with us!
Author's Response: Thanks for your kind words.
Good story!
Author's Response: Thank you.
A pair of Snapes? Huh, wonder who the lucky woman is? Great story!
Author's Response: Yes, lucky woman indeed!
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