| Title: Chapter 5
| 23 Jan 2013 12:29 am
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| Reviewer: hoppingpen (Anonymous)
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Excellent but I would add more SS and HP interaction towards the end. You've got Draco in there quite a bit and I think it would be more fitting to replace some of that with SS. But just a thought. It is excellent as it is, too.
| Title: Chapter 1
| 12 Dec 2012 12:42 pm
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| Reviewer: Sheogorath (Anonymous)
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Nice. Long enough to be meaty, yet short enough that my attention didn't wander, and very imaginative.
| Title: Chapter 5
| 12 Dec 2012 12:40 pm
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| Reviewer: Sheogorath (Anonymous)
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Nice. Long enough to be meaty, yet short enough that my attention didn't wander, and very imaginitive.
This. Just... this. Beautifully written with a dash of everything that could possibly make this story *right*. Brilliantly done. Definitely a new favorite. 10/10
This is one of my faveeeeee stories, love it every time :) Hope you write something new soon!
Awwww I just love this story so much I had to come back and read it again :D
Whoa! That one went WAY over my head! What just happened? Did Hermoine have to die in order for Harry to return to normal? Or did it merely take time for Harry's magic to stop trying to protect him? I'm confused!!!! Anyway, other than that, it was a really good story and I really liked it. :D
Author's Response: Since Harry's magic was protecting both of them, when it stopped protecting him after Lucius showed up, it also stopped protecting her and because she was at St. Mungo's, there was no one to save her. I'm sorry it wasn't more clear.
Thanks for the review.
That was a really good way to show everyone what had happened. *nods*
"Mummy, where's you been?" Harry cried. Narcissa was several inches shorter than Harry was, but Harry managed to bury his face in her shoulder. "I missed you, Mummy. I missed you so much."
*sniffles*
Have I mentioned that your Harry reminds me vaguely of my Session Transcripts one? Only . . . not.
Aw, poor Hermione. I guess there was no escaping this fate for her. I'm glad that Harry was able to be saved and that he still remained close with Draco, Narcissa, and Severus, his own little family.
What an interesting and sad story. Very well done, and thanks for sharing it with us! =)
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