Nice bit of excitement at the start of the story, but Harry really comes across as a mouthy brat. Maybe Snape should just have silenced him! But, they have come to an understanding, which must be good.
I'm glad that Harry finally pushed through it and apologized to Snape for the awful things he said. Personally, I think Snape could stand to apologize a little more, too. They both acted atrociously, but I'm glad that they're on speaking terms now.
Great job, and thank you for sharing this fic with us! =)
| Title: Chapter 3
| 30 May 2012 9:46 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Very good piece thank you
interesting a sequil please
Good story, I hope in this world Snape's life does not end so horribly.
Good job.
I'm glad that Snape and Harry have resolved their differences and are working towards a common
cause.
Hmm, the dialogue seemed kind of forced and the fact that Harry apologized right after he was done saying how much he hated Snape seemed unrealistic. If the animosity had played out a bit longer and something happened in which they realized they were wrong about each other and then the forgave the other, it was have seemed more logical and believable.
Definitely a good effort on your part and you still did a good job writing it. Keep it up!
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