| Title: How We Lived Then
| 26 Nov 2019 9:26 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you. They were all IC in this chapter but also OC and the mixture allowed the chapter to flow
Aw, the poor kids have such weight on their shoulders. :(
Harry hadn't told the adults about the mission from Dumbledore? But Ron saw him giving the locket to Severus...
I love the bit about Snape's eyes! It's so fitting, and sooo true, I reckon. Because his expression doesn't reveal much, but his eyes might.
Is Dumbledore really that bad? It's like they're trying to keep the Dark Lord out, not a Headmaster of Hogwarts. Though, if it covered up what James did than I suppose it's not much different to commiting an evil act by his own wand.
I think the spacings are a bit off, as in they're too wide and is a little confusing at times as it's like a sentence gets cut off and then continues after a big space. It's not too big a deal, just something I noticed and think it would be easier to read without that.
Harry's right, it sounds really hard what he and Hermione had to do to keep up acts like that. I'd be a bit angry too. Aww :( feel sad for Draco, not having friends and being so doubtful. Oooh ominious final line! I hope everything turns out okay...
I think the scene with Harry, Draco, and Hermione was really crucial to the plot. Not only that but it was necessary in the sense that we got to see more of the characters' personalities.
Wow, I love how you've managed to create something so original and yet describe everything so well! Such a good story :) Can't wait to read the next chapters!
Wow very powerful chapter.
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