Yay, Dobby!
"Harry stood there. He wanted to say something. He wanted to tell his Dad to be safe. But, Severus had been too fast." This is a powerful sentence. I think it said a lot, and I felt sad for Harry.
Ugh, Dumblefore, again.
I simply adore Lucius and Narcissa when they're not evil and whatnot. I also loved that it was Lucius who comforted Harry first by rubbing his back, rather than Narcissa. We don't normally get to see a side like this to him.
I found it amusing that when Harry said Ron saw them, the first thing Draco asked was "why where you at Saint Mungos?". And Draco making a mission to kill Dumbledore was amusing too, in a sadder way though.
Awww, love the framed picture. And the words around the frame too. I wonder who was at the door though...Dumbledore, maybe?
Good chapter!!
Ugh, Dumbledore! How could he do that? I'm glad Severus figured it out and protected himself from it in the future. "the man under all the layers of black fabric." I really liked this line!
This entire chapter made me sad for Harry, and for Severus. I'm not sure I agree with what Severus did to the Dursleys, as surely magic would have been detected as being used there? Either way, it's the Dursley's own fault! I did like how he made it so it would seem that Harry is still living there, I'm interested as to what other would think if they realise the'd been tricked all those years. Karma, Dumbledore. Off to read more, of course...I'm already hooked.
Just wanted to point out at this line "he, Hermione, and Harry had nuck away..." I think you meant "snuck".
Other than that, this was a really interesting set-up. Though short, I liked that it was mostly from Ron's POV. It was suspenseful enough that I knew something was going to happen, without really getting a hint as to what. Off to read more...
Awwww that was an amazing ending :) I loved your story, definitely lived up to my expectations! The storyline was so original and you wrote the whole thing really well! Good job :)
Phew! I got really scared for a minute there!
Ahhh can't wait to see what happens!
| Title: Realizing They Left and Freeing the Forgotten
| 01 Jun 2012 1:56 pm
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| Reviewer: hazpotsfan (Signed)
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Oh dear! Those three are going to be in so much trouble :/
Good job. I'm glad that the war is over and that everyone is safe and have their families to love and support them.
Love love loved it! Wonderful job with this story!
Author's Response: Thank you for all of your reviews. I really appreciate all of your reviews:)
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