I love your story so much I can't belive it doesn't have more reviews it's amazing I couldn't put mu phone down I really hope you finish it and not leave it like this I wanna know what happens!
| Title: "Protect Him With Your Life."
| 14 Apr 2013 9:31 pm
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| Reviewer: Lillie (Anonymous)
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Love it love it love it! Please carry on!
| Title: A Game of Quidditch
| 07 Aug 2012 10:45 am
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| Reviewer: Kai (Signed)
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Small error here, you had Harry flying on his broom prior in the summer. He also mentioned brushing up on his flying (his firebolt getting exercise I think you phrased it as) prior to this chapter as well. A small inconsistency, but a noticeable one, no less.
BTW: I noticed that Albus took Harry from #4 before Harry could pack.
What about Harry's belongings?
Oh, poor Harry. He would rather have Snape as a guardian than Minerva. I wish that something could work out for him.
Great chapter as usual. Can't wait for more.
| Title: A Game of Quidditch
| 16 Jun 2012 6:01 pm
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| Reviewer: Ayodia (Signed)
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Oh, my, sorry! I misread the last sentense!
You got it right : "vous devez beaucoup l'aimer"
| Title: A Game of Quidditch
| 16 Jun 2012 5:58 pm
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| Reviewer: Ayodia (Signed)
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Hi! As a native french speeker, may I help you?
I truly mean no offenses and your french is quite good, but... may i suggest this translation?
You have a good looking son."
=> Votre fils est très beau
"Pardon? What did you say?"
"Excusez-moi? Qu'avez-vous dit?"
"Your son. He doesn't look like you, but it looks like he has been brought up well."
"Votre fils. Il ne vous ressemble pas, mais il a l'air bien élevé
"But..." "...Thank you, madam. I can assure you, he is well taken care of."
"Mais... Merci madame. Je peut vous assurer que j'en prend soin"
"Well, you must love him very much."
"Il doit beaucoup vous aimer"
And you say "le Louvre", without the '.
Very nice story by the way, I'm looking forward reading the next chapters! :)
Just finished this chapter. Love that you used the "dagger" section of Macbeth, as that's my favorite part out of the entire play to the point where I have it memorized, and it really does fit perfectly with the story. Nice job so far!
Wow, this chapter is like one of my own stories with the piano and everything. Lily's Theme is my favourite piece by Desplat:)
Loved the chapter.
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